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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. v. 7

In the modern era, the are field will be transform, such as transformation of model business from small to large enterprise. In several countries, due to improvement and vast expansion of supermarkets, a plethora number of tiny local business can not compete with that. Several people argue that will be deterioration for local business and at the end it will be closed. In this essay, I believe that development could be threat for them. First, supermarket have a large number of customer and they have more convenience for shopping. Due to of that, people have tendency to choose supermarket than private store or small enterprise. For instance, mall will provide numerous of things that will not provide by local communities enterprise. The effect, people will not come and with slow time, their business will be collapse and death. in other hands, several people have a tendency to agree giant place for shopping that should be developed due to of tax that will pay to nation. On the contrary, it will be make profitable for one part and the other part of people will not have large number effect for their economic. The profit not only for entrepreneur, will be enjoyed for local people yet. In conclusion, we need to emphasize local community to improve their life with soaring their profit form their business.

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the are
 field will be Consider using a past participle here: "transformed".transformed
transform
, such as transformation of model You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldworkemploymenttrade
business
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small
 to large enterprise. In several countries, due to improvement and vast expansion of supermarkets, a plethora number of tiny You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldworkemploymenttrade
business
 can not compete with that. Several You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 argue that will be deterioration for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldworkemploymenttrade
business
 and at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 it will be closed
. In this essay, I believe that development could be threat for them.

First
, supermarket have Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"manynumerous
a large number of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).customer, and
customer and
 they have more convenience for shopping. Due to of that, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 have tendency to choose supermarket than private store or This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 enterprise. For instance
, mall will provide numerous of things that will not provide by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean "communities'" or "community's"?communities'community's
communities
 enterprise. The effect, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 will not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 and with slow time, their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldworkemploymenttrade
business
 will be collapse and death.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterIn
in
 other hands, several You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 have a tendency to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 giant place for shopping that should be developed
 due to of tax that will pay to nation. On the contrary
, it will be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 profitable for one part and the other part of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 will not have large number effect for their economic. The profit not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 for entrepreneur, will be enjoyed
 for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
yet
.

In conclusion
, we need to emphasize You use this word too often, consider replacing it withprovincialregional
local
 community to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 their life with soaring their profit form their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldworkemploymenttrade
business
. 