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Some people think that because some students find some subjects such as maths and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extend do you agree? v.1

Some people think that because some students find some subjects such as maths and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. v. 1
Nowadays, folks elaborate that challenging subjects such as maths and philosophy should be a must at school, in contrast, some argue that, they should not make it a priority for all. In my opinion, following the complete range of subjects at a primary level is necessary. Despite, the difficulty of thesis subjects for some. In short, satisfaction evolves learnings while maths and philosophy stimulate the think tank. Firstly, compulsory on the thesis is important to create the fundamental intelligence of disciples, while teachers make it an opportunity to identify students specific skills and shape them for the future. For example, Maths is essential for any curriculum at its academic level. Thus, students learn to think in deep in their own view, then would perform very well at their jobs. In short, primary education persist all sorts of theories is good for shaping up good citizens. On the other hand, after ordinary level, students should be given an opportunity to concentrate on a specific subject in which they are good at, avoiding difficult syllabuses. As well as, their likeness will make them perform. To Illustrate, arts, music and drama, based on creativity and freedom. As the subjects get complicated more time and effort has to be put into it while separating disciples on their competency is, indeed. As a result, students have to concentrate on one what skill they persist. In short, later part of schooling should be vital on the student's ability in shaping up teens for their future assignments. In conclusion, mathematical and ideology fundamentals being compulsory at early schooling carrier is vital, while the later part in subject selection is better at progression. In my view, parents and teachers should work together To identify their children's ability. In a word, subject selection at upper school benefits the " double side of the sword".
Nowadays, folks elaborate that challenging
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subjects
such as
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maths
and philosophy should be a
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must
at school,
in contrast
,
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some
argue that, they should not
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make
it a priority for all. In my opinion, following the complete range of
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subjects
at a primary level is necessary. Despite, the difficulty of thesis
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subjects
for
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some
. In short, satisfaction evolves learnings while
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maths
and philosophy stimulate the
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think
tank.

Firstly
, compulsory on the thesis is
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important
to create the fundamental intelligence of disciples, while teachers
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make
it an opportunity to identify
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students
specific
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and shape them for the future.
For example
,
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Maths
is essential for any curriculum at its academic level.
Thus
,
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students
learn to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
in deep in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
view, then would perform
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very
well at their jobs. In short, primary education persist all sorts of theories is
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good
for shaping up
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good
citizens.

On the other hand
, after ordinary level,
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students
should be
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given
an opportunity to concentrate on a specific
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subject
in which they are
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good
at, avoiding difficult syllabuses.
As well
as, their likeness will
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make
them perform. To Illustrate, arts, music and drama, based on creativity and freedom. As the
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subjects
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get
complicated more time and effort
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has to
be put
into it while separating disciples on their competency is,
indeed
.
As a result
,
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students
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have to
concentrate on one what
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skill
they persist. In short, later part of schooling should be vital on the student's ability in shaping up teens for their future assignments.

In conclusion
, mathematical and ideology fundamentals being compulsory at early schooling carrier is vital, while the later part in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
selection is better at progression.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
my view, parents and teachers should work together To identify their children's ability.
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In
a word,
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subject
selection at upper school benefits the
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double side of the sword
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.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that because some students find some subjects such as maths and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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