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Some people say that the Internet is bringing people together by making the world smaller. To what extent do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another? v.3

Some people say that the Internet is bringing people together by making the world smaller. v. 3
Science and technology have revolutionized the mode of contact. It is argued by many individuals that the internet is closing the communication gap between people. In my opinion, I totally agree with this statement because you can contact someone in the other part of the globe within a second by contacting online or emailing them. In the world before the internet, it used to be a hassle calling anyone in the other part of the world. You needed to have a different connection and had to wait for minutes or hours before the line went through. However, now, you can just unlock your phone and call anyone online through so many different applications, which also has options of video-calling so that you can see your loved one live, which gets connected within a blink of a second. For example, WhatsApp allows you to call everyone that has an active network. Therefore, people feel closer to each other today than before. Sending a postal used to be the only source of sending a document in the past. Nowadays, electronic mailing has made life so much easier. You can email anyone, anywhere and anything by just clicking a button and even get a reply without having to wait for a long time. To illustrate, most of the business is now run through emailing. Hence, the web, allows people to communicate easily through messaging electronically. In conclusion, some people argue that the internet is minimizing the distance between people. In my opinion, I completely agree with it because calling, even video-calling and emailing has made individuals sitting in the different parts of the globe so close to each other.
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is argued
by
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individuals that the internet is closing the communication gap between
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people
. In my opinion, I
totally
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agree
with this statement
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because
you can contact someone in the
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other
part of the globe within a second by contacting online or emailing them.

In the world
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before
the internet, it
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used
to be a hassle calling anyone in the
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other
part of the world. You needed to have a
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different
connection and had to wait for minutes or hours
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before
the line went
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through
.
However
,
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now
, you can
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just
unlock your phone and call anyone online
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through
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so
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many
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different
applications, which
also
has options of video-calling
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that you can
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see
your
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loved
one
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live
, which
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gets
connected within a blink of a second.
For example
, WhatsApp
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allows
you to call everyone that has an active network.
Therefore
,
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people
feel closer to each
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other
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today
than
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before
.

Sending a postal
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used
to be the
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only
source of sending a document in the past. Nowadays, electronic mailing has made life
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so
much easier. You can email anyone, anywhere and anything by
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just
clicking a button and even
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get
a reply without having to wait for a long time. To illustrate, most of the business is
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now
run
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through
emailing.
Hence
, the web,
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allows
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people
to communicate
easily
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through
messaging
electronically
.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
argue that the internet is minimizing the distance between
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people
. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with it
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because
calling, even video-calling and emailing has made individuals sitting in the
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different
parts of the globe
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so
close to each
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other
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the Internet is bringing people together by making the world smaller. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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