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overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle this problem v.21

overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle this problem v. 21
It has been observed that, in the various nations, overpopulation is becoming a major factor which leads to main problems. The following essay state one problem associated with the exorbitant rise in the crowd and the suggestions to reduce the impact in the country because of this. The prominent concern related to the excess count is the lack of good jobs. The government has been failing to provide jobs for all the teenagers, even the individuals with having high qualification and skills. Moreover, people need money to have a better family by making the relatives happy. Often, the job issue, makes the youngsters to join anti-social gangs. In India, the law authority had a survey with the people who always involve in negative tasks, reveal that, 10% of the population joined in the group only to solve the financial issues they had because of the jobless situation. From this, it is clear that over population is creating issue in an individual career. We can handle this issue related to the people density by creating more career opportunities for the individual and giving awareness to start controlling the birth rate. The government should monitor and foreseen the growth of the crowd, and make sure that all the people are getting at least a job to satisfy their family's daily needs. For example, In Kerala, the law enforcing agency has started a group for females who do not have salary and started assigning tasks to them such as cleaning the surroundings, planting trees. This had a positive the response over society and is able to solve the daily living issues. In conclusion, overpopulation has so many issues such as job scarcity in the society. However, the impact can be reduced, if the government and individuals start taking steps like controlling the birth rate and increasing the career offer.
It has
been observed
that, in the various nations, overpopulation is becoming a major factor which leads to main problems. The following essay state one problem associated with the exorbitant rise in the crowd and the suggestions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the impact in the country
because of this
.

The prominent concern related to the excess count is the lack of
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good
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jobs
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
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government
has been failing to provide
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jobs
for all the
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teenagers
, even the
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individuals
with having high qualification and
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skills
.
Moreover
,
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people
need money to have a better family by making the relatives happy.
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Often
, the
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job
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issue
,
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makes
the youngsters to
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join
anti-social gangs. In India, the law authority had a survey with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who always involve in
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negative
tasks, reveal that, 10% of the population
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joined
in the group
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only
to solve the financial
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issues
they had
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because
of the jobless situation. From this, it is
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clear
that over population is creating
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issue
in an
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individual
career.

We can handle this
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issue
related to the
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people
density by creating more career opportunities for the
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individual
and giving awareness to
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start
controlling the birth rate. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should monitor and foreseen the growth of the crowd, and
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make
sure that all the
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people
are getting at least a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
to satisfy their family's daily needs.
For example
, In Kerala, the law enforcing agency has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
a group for females who do not have salary and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
assigning tasks to them such as cleaning the surroundings, planting trees. This had a
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positive
the response over society and is able to solve the daily living issues.

In conclusion
, overpopulation has
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so
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many
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issues
such as
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job
scarcity in the society.
However
, the impact can be
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reduced
, if the
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government
and
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individuals
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start
taking steps like controlling the birth rate and increasing the career offer.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle this problem v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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