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Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment v. 1
With the rapid development of technology, television has become a highly use electronic appliances. Many people believe that this can be more useful as a knowledge sharing device while others argue that it is more useful for entertainment. This essay will discuss why televisions are helpful in education but why it is more considered as a device for entertainment. During the last few decades, television and broadcasting technologies have evolved significantly. Now there are myriad number of channels are available for users of any age range. It is now really easy to watch and learn information about other countries around the world. For example, people can learn lot about other countries and their distinct cultures by watching National Geographic Channel. Hence, TV is considered as an ideal device to educating people in certain demographics. However, people are more focused on profits and economic growth in the current gaolable context. Therefore, channel producers are tending to fulfil the needs of majority. Despite the importance of learning, many people use TVs to release their stress by watching movies, music videos or other entertaining reality shows. For instance, one of the largest TV channels in Sri Lanka only has one dedicated channel for education. But they have 12 other channels for entertainment. Surprisingly, that only channel does not make any profits while other channels are at their top. In conclusion, with the increasing popularity of the televisions, its usage has become debatable. This essay discussed why TV has educational benefits but why it is ultimately catered for audience who are more likely to use it for entertainment. In my opinion, even though TV brings knowledge to one's life, it is widely used for entertaining.
With the rapid development of technology,
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television
has become a
highly
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use
electronic appliances.
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Many
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people
believe that this can be more useful as a knowledge sharing device while others argue that it is more useful for entertainment. This essay will discuss why
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televisions
are helpful in education
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but
why it is more considered as a device for entertainment.

During the last few decades,
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television
and broadcasting technologies have evolved
significantly
.
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Now
there are myriad number of
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channels
are available for users of any age range. It is
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now
really
easy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
and learn information about
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other
countries around the world.
For example
,
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people
can learn lot about
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other
countries and their distinct cultures by watching National Geographic
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Channel
.
Hence
, TV
is considered
as an ideal device to educating
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people
in certain demographics.

However
,
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people
are more focused on profits and economic growth in the
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current
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gaolable
context.
Therefore
,
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channel
producers are tending to fulfil the needs of majority. Despite the importance of learning,
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many
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people
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use
TVs to release their
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stress
by watching movies, music videos or
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other
entertaining reality
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shows
.
For instance
, one of the largest TV
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channels
in Sri Lanka
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only
has one dedicated
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channel
for education.
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But
they have 12
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other
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channels
for entertainment.
Surprisingly
, that
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only
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channel
does not
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make
any profits while
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other
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channels
are at their top.

In conclusion
, with the increasing popularity of the
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televisions
, its usage has become debatable. This essay discussed why TV has educational benefits
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but
why it is
ultimately
catered for audience who are more likely to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it for entertainment. In my opinion,
even though
TV brings knowledge to one's life, it is
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for entertaining.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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