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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 4
The controversial topic concerning complex product packaging never fails to attract public attention. There have been multiple debates on whether it is the manufacturer's responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging used, or the consumers are the ones accountable for avoiding excessively packed products. I am an advocate for manufacturers to limit the amount of packaging used on their merchants. It is reasonable for people to believe that how much packaging material to be used remains a critical decision by product makers since if no businesses are supplying products with excessive packaging to the market, customers would not have to avoid extravagantly packaged goods. For example, take Apple as an example, all Apple products' packaging adheres to a simple principle, boxes and their internal liners are all made from recyclable paper instead of plastic wraps and containers for each device and accessories. As a result, Apple is leading the industrial design for product packaging as well as influencing multiple industries for reducing packaging material. Also, consumers who make purchase decisions are the ones that should be educated to be pro-actively choosing the products with minimal packaging. Nevertheless, it should be mentioned that if marketplaces are supplied with products which are overly packaged, and customers are avoiding these products in supermarkets, this will lead to the manufacturers choose to avoid redundant packaging. That is to say, to reduce the level of packaging material, consumers although not as significant as supermarkets and manufacturers, would also be contributory to the issue. To summarise, a conclusion can be reached that supermarkets and manufacturers have a primary responsibility to lessen the amount of packaging used on the products they sell.
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product
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packaging
never fails to attract public attention. There have been multiple debates on whether it is the manufacturer's responsibility to
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reduce
the amount of
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packaging
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used
, or the consumers are the
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ones
accountable for avoiding
excessively
packed
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products
. I am an advocate for
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manufacturers
to limit the amount of
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packaging
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used
on their merchants.

It is reasonable for
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people
to believe that how much
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packaging
material to be
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used
remains a critical decision by
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product
makers since if no businesses are supplying
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products
with excessive
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packaging
to the market, customers would not
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have to
avoid
extravagantly
packaged
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goods
.
For example
, take Apple as an example, all Apple products'
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packaging
adheres to a simple principle, boxes and their internal liners are all made from recyclable paper
instead
of plastic wraps and containers for each device and accessories.
As a result
, Apple is leading the industrial design for
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product
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packaging
as well
as influencing multiple industries for reducing
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packaging
material.

Also
, consumers who
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make
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purchase
decisions are the
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ones
that should
be educated
to be pro-
actively
choosing the
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products
with minimal
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packaging
.
Nevertheless
, it should
be mentioned
that if marketplaces
are supplied
with
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products
which are
overly
packaged, and customers are avoiding these
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products
in supermarkets, this will lead to the
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manufacturers
choose to avoid redundant
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packaging
.
That is
to say, to
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reduce
the level of
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packaging
material, consumers although not as significant as supermarkets and
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manufacturers
, would
also
be contributory to the issue.

To
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summarise
, a conclusion can
be reached
that supermarkets and
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manufacturers
have a primary responsibility to lessen the amount of
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packaging
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used
on the
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products
they sell.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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