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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.7

Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 7
Climate change is a problem facing countries around the world as people start to realise the harm that they are inflicting on the Earth. One of the biggest concerns was the overuse of plastic. Some people determined that supermarkets and manufacturers are to blame and should reduce the amount of packaging they use. Others believe that it is up to the consumers to refrain from purchasing over packaged products. In this essay, both views will be discussed. On one hand, manufacturers are the biggest producers of goods and supermarkets help distribute and promote them. By reducing the amount of plastic and papers used, they can effectively reduce the pollution to the environment. For instance, manufacturers can use paper packaging for plastic milk cartons while supermarkets can promote the use of paper bags or recycling bags. The point that it is their responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging is certainly very compelling. On the other hand, it is the best interest of the manufacturers and supermarkets to attract consumers to buy their products. Packaging their products is one of the most effective ways to attract the attention of the consumers. If people truly want the manufacturers and supermarkets to reduce the amount of packaging used, they should boycott or at least buy less of the overly packaged products. Thus, consumers also have a vital role in solving this concern. In conclusion, it is believed that there should be a collaborative effort between the manufacturers/ supermarkets and also consumers in order to reduce the pollution from overusing plastics.
Climate
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change
is a problem facing countries around the world as
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people
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start
to
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realise
the harm that they are inflicting on the Earth. One of the biggest concerns was the overuse of
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plastic
.
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Some
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people
determined that supermarkets and
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manufacturers
are to blame and should
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reduce
the
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amount
of
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packaging
they
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use
. Others believe that it is up to the
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consumers
to refrain from purchasing over packaged
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products
. In this essay, both views will
be discussed
.

On one hand,
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manufacturers
are the biggest producers of
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goods
and supermarkets
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help
distribute and promote them. By reducing the
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amount
of
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plastic
and papers
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used
, they can
effectively
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reduce
the pollution to the environment.
For instance
,
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manufacturers
can
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use
paper
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packaging
for
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plastic
milk cartons while supermarkets can promote the
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use
of paper bags or recycling bags. The point that it is their responsibility to
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reduce
the
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amount
of
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packaging
is
certainly
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very
compelling.

On the other hand
, it is the best interest of the
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manufacturers
and supermarkets to attract
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consumers
to
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buy
their
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products
.
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Packaging
their
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products
is one of the most effective ways to attract the attention of the
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consumers
. If
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people
truly
want the
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manufacturers
and supermarkets to
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reduce
the
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amount
of
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packaging
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used
, they should boycott or at least
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buy
less of the
overly
packaged
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products
.
Thus
,
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consumers
also
have a vital role in solving this concern.

In conclusion
, it
is believed
that there should be a collaborative effort between the manufacturers/ supermarkets and
also
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consumers
in order to
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reduce
the pollution from overusing
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plastics
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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