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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.6

Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 6
Large quantities of plastics are used in various forms in the packaging industry. Some sections of society believe that companies should limit the number of plastics being used while others believe that individuals can make a difference by saying no to goods that require a lot of packaging. In the given paragraphs, I will discuss both the views before giving my opinion. On one hand, manufacturing units should be made aware of the harmful effects of using packaging material on the environment. Plastic is the leading cause of pollution and the fact that it takes thousands of years to fully degrade in itself explains why its use should be regulated. The world is already witnessing environmental degradation and plastic is undoubtedly a major contributor. The majority of the plastic ends up in the world’s oceans and it has had detrimental effects on marine life. From affecting the ecosystem to being responsible for the extinction of species, we can say that the effects of plastics on our environment are anything but positive. On the other hand, consumers should take matters into their own hands and reduce the consumption of products that require more packaging. Moreover, fewer demands for such products will directly result in limited manufacturing and reduced sales. The use of plastics will also curtail significantly. Certainly, this will not only compel supermarkets and industries but also encourage them to make changes in their packaging policy. In conclusion, companies and individuals both are equally responsible for the excessive usage of plastics.  Users should be made aware of the catastrophic effects of this artificial material while manufacturers must also look for suitable alternatives.
Large quantities of
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plastics
are
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used
in various forms in the
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packaging
industry.
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Some
sections of society believe that
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companies
should limit the number of
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plastics
being
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used
while others believe that individuals can
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make
a difference by saying no to
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goods
that require
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a lot of
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packaging
. In the
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given
paragraphs, I will discuss both the views
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before
giving my opinion.

On one hand, manufacturing units should
be made
aware of the harmful effects of using
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packaging
material on the environment.
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Plastic
is the leading cause of pollution and the fact that it takes thousands of years to
fully
degrade in itself
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explains
why its
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use
should
be regulated
. The world is already witnessing environmental degradation and
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plastic
is
undoubtedly
a major contributor. The majority of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
ends up in the world’s oceans and it has had detrimental effects on marine life. From affecting the ecosystem to being responsible for the extinction of species, we can say that the effects of
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plastics
on our environment are anything
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but
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positive
.

On the other hand
, consumers should take matters into their
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own
hands and
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reduce
the consumption of products that require more
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packaging
.
Moreover
, fewer demands for such products will
directly
result in limited manufacturing and
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reduced
sales. The
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use
of
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plastics
will
also
curtail
significantly
.
Certainly
, this will not
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only
compel supermarkets and industries
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but
also
encourage them to
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make
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changes
in their
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packaging
policy.

In conclusion
,
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companies
and individuals both are
equally
responsible for the excessive usage of
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plastics
.  Users should
be made
aware of the catastrophic effects of this artificial material while manufacturers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
also
look for suitable alternatives.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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