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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 5
In this modern era, over-packing of products seems to be a tactic used by the manufacturers in staying ahead of their competitors and maintaining their market shares. Products with excessive packing not only cost the consumers but also impact the environment in a negative way. Some people believe that supermarkets and manufacturers should be responsible for producing products with a lot of packing. Others claim that consumers should not pay their attention to over-packaged products. This essay will look at both views. Firstly, supermarkets and manufacturers should take responsibility to reduce the packaging of their products. As they are the main producers and promoters of all the products in the markets, so it is much easier for them to reduce the packaging instead of the consumer. They can apply simple steps and regulations over their manufacturing processes. For example, the drink bottles made with thick layers of plastic should be replaced with a thinner layer of plastic or carton bottles. This will reduce the amount of plastic waste and help the environment. Thus, it is a strong argument in convincing the manufacturers and supermarkets to simplify their packaging. On the other hand, customers also have a key role to play in this matter. They should consider wisely before purchasing over-packed products. If consumers reduce the consumption of over-packed products, the manufacturers will limit the production of such products. This will result in a decline in sale figures, which eventually leads them to change their packaging policies and requirements. Thus, customers should start banning companies which sell products with excessive packaging. To conclude, the trend of over-packing of products should be eliminated to help the environment and the purchasing cost. Collective efforts from both producers and consumers are crucial in tackling this issue.
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products
seems to be a tactic
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used
by the
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manufacturers
in staying ahead of their competitors and maintaining their market shares.
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Products
with excessive packing not
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only
cost the
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consumers
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but
also
impact the environment in a
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negative
way.
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Some
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people
believe that supermarkets and
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manufacturers
should be responsible for producing
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products
with
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a lot of
packing. Others claim that
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consumers
should not pay their attention to over-packaged
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products
. This essay will look at both views.

Firstly
, supermarkets and
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manufacturers
should take responsibility to
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reduce
the packaging of their
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products
. As they are the main producers and promoters of all the
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products
in the markets,
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so
it is much easier for them to
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reduce
the packaging
instead
of the
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consumer
. They can apply simple steps and regulations over their manufacturing processes.
For example
, the drink bottles made with thick layers of plastic should
be replaced
with a thinner layer of plastic or carton bottles. This will
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reduce
the amount of plastic waste and
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help
the environment.
Thus
, it is a strong argument in convincing the
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manufacturers
and supermarkets to simplify their packaging.

On the other hand
, customers
also
have a key role to play in this matter. They should consider
wisely
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before
purchasing over-packed
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products
. If
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consumers
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reduce
the consumption of over-packed
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products
, the
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manufacturers
will limit the production of such
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products
. This will result in a decline in sale figures, which
eventually
leads them to
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change
their packaging policies and requirements.
Thus
, customers should
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start
banning
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companies
which sell
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products
with excessive packaging.

To conclude
, the trend of over-packing of
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products
should
be eliminated
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the environment and the purchasing cost. Collective efforts from both producers and
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consumers
are crucial in tackling this issue.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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