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With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. v. 1
It is an undeniable fact that with the advancement in the mobile technology, people tend to write an email or a text rather than a letter. Some people believe that writing letters could disappear completely in the near future. I, however, do not agree with this stance as letter writing is needed in many official settings as well as it works as a caring gesture. Firstly, letters are still being used in many official settings where usage of such documents can not be ignored. It is essential in many organisations for formal documentation. For example, letters are still being used in the electricity department of India for different purposes like for new connections, complaints, and suggestions. This department keeps such letters as an evidence for future reference. Moreover, such letters need signatures from different people which might not be possible in the case of texts from electronic gadgets. Secondly, hand written letters for friends and family shows an emotional gesture which in the case of a text or an email, with the help of mobile devices, cannot be shown. In the era of technology, people receive texts and emails every day or every moment through electronic devices, but when they get a hand written letter, it shows an extra effort taken by the writer. This becomes a gesture of care, respect and importance, and people feel special. In addition, people use letters on special occasions like new year, birthdays and valentines days. In conclusion, although in the fast pace technological century emails or texts by mobiles or computers are super quick and have become part of daily lives, letters still have their importance in some government departments and in the personal lives of people.
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people
tend to write an email or a
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text
rather
than a
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letter
.
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Some
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people
believe that writing
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letters
could disappear completely in the near future. I,
however
, do not
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agree
with this stance as
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letter
writing
is needed
in
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many
official settings
as well
as it works as a caring gesture.

Firstly
,
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letters
are
still
being
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used
in
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many
official settings where usage of such documents can not be
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ignored
. It is essential in
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many
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organisations
for formal documentation.
For example
,
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letters
are
still
being
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used
in the electricity department of India for
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different
purposes like for new connections, complaints, and suggestions. This department
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keeps
such
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letters
as an evidence for future reference.
Moreover
, such
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letters
need signatures from
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different
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people
which might not be possible in the case of
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texts
from electronic gadgets.

Secondly
,
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hand written
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letters
for friends and family
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shows
an emotional gesture which in the case of a
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text
or an email, with the
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help
of mobile devices, cannot
be shown
. In the era of technology,
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people
receive
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texts
and emails every day or every moment through electronic devices,
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but
when they
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get
a
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hand written
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letter
, it
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shows
an extra effort taken by the writer. This becomes a gesture of care, respect and importance, and
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people
feel special.
In addition
,
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people
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use
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letters
on special occasions like new year, birthdays and valentines days.

In conclusion
, although in the
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fast
pace technological century emails or
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texts
by mobiles or computers are super quick and have become part of daily
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lives
,
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letters
still
have their importance in
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some
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government
departments and in the personal
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lives
of
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people
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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