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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.10

Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 10
In shopping in the public market is an easy and cheap amount, because their brand they do not have taxes. Nowadays, the people want to buy and shop in the grocery, In they think the element in the supermarkets and maker have a responsibility to less the pay of packaging of the thing the buy. The other people talk it is the responsibility of customer not buy their item which is full of covering. In this essay, it is my view that to shopping in the mall stock their device is high in value, because their item they have also a tax. If you buy in the bodega the packaging people need to pay and the price there is higher than in the local market. To begin with, In my opinion buying or shopping in the huge backlog is expensive, because even the cover and the place have a pay. Some other humankind, they are practical, they do not like to buy in the supermarkets, because they know even the producer have also taxed. For example, if the human kind bought a one pack of vegetables in the supermarket they have a 30% increase for the tax and wrapping. While in the market your 30% you have two pack of vegetables. However, buying the product in the huge store is clean and ready to cook, people they did not hassle to wash for how many times. Moving forth, to pick out in the chain store it is the easiest form of people who is busy in their action of living, and in this place it is not crowd even the item is pricey. For example, go shopping in a large self-service cache is it good if the people who bring their family, because it is not noisy and many customers. Moreover, sometimes if the time is a holiday the queue is the huge dilemma of the customers. But mankind needs to sacrifice and more patience, so that they have a good way of shopping. In conclusion, shopping in the supermarket it is not a problem, but the manufacturer need to give an increase of their price for the sell, because the use packaging and they pay a place of their product. In my opinion, it is the way of living of people if the are purchase the high price of the product and it is has also helped in our society the producer pay tax and government need the income.
In
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shopping
in the public market is an easy and
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cheap
amount,
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because
their brand they do not have
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taxes
. Nowadays, the
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people
want to
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buy
and shop in the grocery, In they
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think
the element in the supermarkets and maker have a responsibility to less the
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pay
of packaging of the thing the
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buy
. The other
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people
talk it is the responsibility of customer not
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buy
their item which is full of covering. In this essay, it is my view that to
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shopping
in the mall stock their device is high in value,
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because
their item they have
also
a
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tax
. If you
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buy
in the bodega the packaging
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people
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need
to
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pay
and the price there is higher than in the local market.

To
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begin
with, In my opinion buying or
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shopping
in the huge backlog is expensive,
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because
even the cover and the place have a
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pay
.
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Some
other humankind, they are practical, they do not like to
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buy
in the supermarkets,
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because
they know even the producer have
also
taxed.
For example
, if the human kind
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bought
a one pack of vegetables in the supermarket they have a 30% increase for the
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tax
and wrapping.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
in the market your 30% you have two
Possible agreement error. The noun 'pack' seems to be countable, so consider using: "packs".
pack
of vegetables.
However
, buying the product in the huge store is clean and ready to cook,
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people
they did not hassle to wash for how
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many
times.

Moving forth, to pick out in the chain store it is the easiest form of
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people
who is busy in their action of living, and in this place it is not crowd even the item is pricey.
For example
, go
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shopping
in a large self-service cache is it
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good
if the
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people
who bring their family,
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because
it is not noisy and
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many
customers.
Moreover
,
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sometimes
if the time is a holiday the queue is the huge dilemma of the customers.
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But
mankind
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needs
to sacrifice and more patience,
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so
that they have a
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good
way of shopping.

In conclusion
,
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shopping
in the supermarket it is not a problem,
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but
the manufacturer
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need
to give an increase of their price for the sell,
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because
the
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use
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
packaging and
they
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pay
a place of their product. In my opinion, it is the way of living of
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people
if
Did you mean "they are" or "there are"?
the are
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purchase
the high price of the product and it is has
also
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helped
in our society the producer
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pay
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tax
and
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government
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need
the income.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
410 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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