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Some people say that students of different age group should be put in same class. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that students of different age group should be put in same class. v. 1
There is no doubt that students of many age brackets can get lots of benefits. Therefor, some individual says that pupils of varies age range ought to be kept in similar class. I completely agree with this statement about allowing the students in the same class. The most important point which drives me to agree is that students are more able to share their knowledge. To put it differently, when pupils often meet with any other person, they may generally swap their own experiences with each other. This certainly not only helps them to learn many things, but also creates a lot of opportunities. For exampel, a different peer group always get in touch in the IELTS classroom not because of gathering information, but because of they might share their useful wisdom to make good bonding. Moreover, Students may easily build their communication to remain in the similar class since it creates a strong interaction with anyone. In fact, this certainly helps to develop their social skills, and eventually this could help them to solve any problem. On the other hand, some people say that students can normally learn about the discipline. This is because many ages students might often involve the unnecessary debate, and consequently this may hinder their learning process to stay in the same class. In spite of this, students may get it difficult to balance their perspective into their fellow. As a result, teachers might find it problematic for all of the students, which can usually obstruct the environment of the class. In conclusion, there is no reason why students will not get lots of advantages. While staying in similar class make the lesson more easier, for many students might often get very difficult to cope up with such activities. Personally, I believe that if the students keep with different ages bracket, this should be an absolutely valuable experience for them.
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lots of benefits. Therefor,
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some
individual says that pupils of varies
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age
range ought to be
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kept
in similar
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class
. I completely
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agree
with this statement about allowing the
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students
in the same
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class
.

The most
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important
point which drives me to
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agree
is that
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students
are more able to share their knowledge. To put it
differently
, when pupils
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often
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meet
with any other person, they may
generally
swap their
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own
experiences with each other. This
certainly
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only
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helps
them to learn
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many
things,
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also
creates
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opportunities. For
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different
peer group always
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in touch in the IELTS classroom not
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because
of gathering information,
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but
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because of they
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might
share their useful wisdom to
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make
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good
bonding.
Moreover
,
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Students
may
easily
build their communication to remain in the similar
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class
since it creates a strong interaction with anyone. In fact, this
certainly
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helps
to develop their social
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skills
, and
eventually
this could
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help
them to solve any problem.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
say that
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students
can
normally
learn about the discipline. This is
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because
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many
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ages
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students
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might
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often
involve the unnecessary debate, and
consequently
this may hinder their learning process to stay in the same
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class
.
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this,
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students
may
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it difficult to balance their perspective into their fellow.
As a result
, teachers
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might
find it problematic for
Consider using "all the".
all of the
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students
, which can
usually
obstruct the environment of the
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class
.

In conclusion
, there is no reason why
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students
will not
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get
lots of advantages. While staying in similar
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class
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make
the lesson
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more easier
, for
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many
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students
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might
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often
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get
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very
difficult to cope up with such activities.
Personally
, I believe that if the
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students
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keep
with
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different
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ages
bracket, this should be an
absolutely
valuable experience for them.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that students of different age group should be put in same class. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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