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Some people say students of different age groups in schools should be put in the same class. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say students of different age groups in schools should be put in the same class. v. 1
Some people believe that students of different age group can be put in the same class. I personally disagree with this suggestion merely because of learning speed and social interaction between the students. Firstly, the difference between the older kids and the younger ones is primarily in their cognitive skills. Older kids have a larger capacity in understanding a more difficult concept compared to their younger peers. For example, a fifth grader can grasp mathematical equation easily. However, if we teach the same subject to a first grader, they will not understand at all. In reverse, if we teach too simple subject, the older one will feel bored. In a formal education setup, such as school, planning a teaching material for both groups will be challenging. Secondly, by putting a different age group in the same class, it may trigger unhealthy environment for both groups. For example, in the recent studies on bullies, research has proven that the underlying cause is due to age gap. The older ones will bully the victims mainly because they are younger. They feel superior compared to their peers. In addition to this, the younger ones would tend to be timid and may affect permanently on their growth. In the long run, it will impact the society at large. To sum up, I personally believe that the mentioned drawbacks above on learning age gap, and possibility on bullies would flip any benefit to the idea. I would suggest having this kind of setup in an informal education environment instead of formal schools.
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. I
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disagree with this suggestion
merely
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because
of learning speed and social interaction between the students.

Firstly
, the difference between the
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older
kids and the
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younger
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ones
is
primarily
in their cognitive
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skills
.
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Older
kids have a larger capacity in understanding a more difficult concept compared to their
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younger
peers.
For example
, a fifth grader can grasp mathematical equation
easily
.
However
, if we teach the same subject to a
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first grader
, they will not understand at all. In reverse, if we teach too simple subject, the
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older
one will feel bored. In a formal education setup, such as school, planning a teaching material for both
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groups
will be challenging.

Secondly
, by putting a
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different
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age
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group
in the same
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class
, it may trigger unhealthy environment for both
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groups
.
For example
, in the recent studies on bullies, research has proven that the underlying cause is due to
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age
gap. The
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older
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ones
will bully the victims
mainly
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because
they are
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younger
. They feel superior compared to their peers.
In addition
to this, the
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younger
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ones
would tend to be timid and may affect
permanently
on their growth. In the long run, it will impact the society at large.

To sum up, I
personally
believe that the mentioned drawbacks above on learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
gap, and possibility on bullies would flip any benefit to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
. I would suggest having this kind of setup in an informal education environment
instead
of formal schools.
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IELTS essay Some people say students of different age groups in schools should be put in the same class. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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