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some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. what is your opinion about that? v.4

some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. what is your opinion about that? v. 4
It is believed by a number of individuals that pupils ought to be taught raising plants and using them in cooking as a curricular activity. From my perspective, this skill is valuable to be learned by little children because growing seeds may motivate the offspring to be patient, in addition, this helps them to be mature cooks in the foresee future. To begin with, schools should be keen on teaching their pupils some steps to raise vegetables and fruits in order to boost their patience. This is because if children grow plants, they will water and nourish them for months till they achieve their goals. For example, a book, which called Child Interests, illustrated the importance of occupying children in their formative stage by raising seeds as this would make them away from being impulsive and be more patient. Moreover, when pupils are taught cooking in their schools, this will provide them by some basics for this skill, which may help them after they become independent. In other words, schools should emphasise on teaching children some tips which help to serve themselves if they face any pressing situation that forces them to cook. For instance, after secondary school a number of students might choose to travel to complete their studies so that these students will be in need to prepare their food. Thus, if pupils learn how to cook, they will be able to face the previous situation easier. In conclusion, I believe that due to teach the young generation to be more patient and encourage them to cook for themselves when they are in-need, applying specific classes to help children to grow plants and cook them is preferable.
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pupils
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steps to raise vegetables and fruits in order to boost their patience. This is
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children
grow plants, they will water and nourish them for months till they achieve their goals.
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children
in their formative stage by raising seeds as this would
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them away from being impulsive and be more patient.

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, this will provide them by
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children
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some
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help
to serve themselves if they face any pressing situation that forces them to cook.
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, after secondary
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school
a number of students might choose to travel to complete their studies
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so
that these students will be in need to prepare their food.
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, if
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pupils
learn how to cook, they will be able to face the previous situation easier.

In conclusion
, I believe that due to teach the young generation to be more patient and encourage them to cook for themselves when they are in-need, applying specific classes to
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help
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children
to grow plants and cook them is preferable.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. what is your opinion about that? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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