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Some people say that reading for pleasure helps develop imagination and better language skills than watching TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that reading for pleasure helps develop imagination and better language skills than watching TV. v. 1
In recent times, a large number of countries have increased the population of youths than they did the elderly. I believe this will improve the technological advancement of the country, which will in turn boost economic development and it is more than any drawback that may be considered. Despite the demerits mentioned below, I think technology will advance greatly if the young ones are more in a nation. Firstly, the youngsters are able to use computer gadgets adequately and they can surf the internet to get any information needed. Secondly, the young adults, usually, have excellent critical thinking abilities, which will enable them to manage difficult situations that may arise. They carry out tasks with minimal supervision and can bring a contract deal to a close in record time. Lastly, the economy of the nation will experience a boost because the workers are fresh and agile. For example, the Chief executive officer of Globacom telecommunication network, Chief Mike Adenuga, who is 92 years old, when he handed over his company to his son, Mike Adenuga junior, who is 44 years old, the company experienced a great increase in their profit margin. Admittedly, there are some basic drawbacks that can be seen when there are few senior citizens in a country. One problem is that there might be increased in crime. In other words, the rate of criminal activities would be high because there are no elders to counsel or channel the energy of the youngsters to a more productive one. This could be detrimental to the country in the long run. Another negative aspect, is that the history and culture of the nation would go into extinction. This is because there would not be anyone to pass down the cultural heritage to the next generation, who are supposed to be the elders in the future. For example, the people of Abada village, in Delta State, Nigeria, have lost the technique of healing people with fracture using local herbs because the youths have all left the countryside to the city for greener pastures. In conclusion, the benefit that the advancement in technology and the economy boost a country will gain if there are more young people residing there far outweighs any downside that nation may face as a result of fewer senior citizens.
In recent times,
a large number of
countries
have increased the population of youths than they did the elderly. I believe this will
improve
the technological advancement of the
country
, which will in turn boost economic development and it is more than any drawback that may
be considered
.

Despite the demerits mentioned below, I
think
technology will advance
greatly
if the young ones are more in a
nation
.
Firstly
, the youngsters are able to
use
computer gadgets
adequately and
they can surf the internet to
get
any information needed.
Secondly
, the young adults,
usually
, have excellent critical thinking abilities, which will enable them to manage difficult situations that may arise. They carry out tasks with minimal supervision and can bring a contract deal to a close in record time.
Lastly
, the economy of the
nation
will experience a boost
because
the workers are fresh and agile.
For example
, the Chief executive officer of
Globacom
telecommunication network, Chief Mike
Adenuga
, who is 92 years
old
, when he handed over his
company
to his son, Mike
Adenuga
junior, who is 44 years
old
, the
company
experienced a great increase in their profit margin.

Admittedly
, there are
some
basic drawbacks that can be
seen
when there are few senior citizens in a
country
. One problem is that there might
be increased
in crime.
In other words
, the rate of criminal activities would be high
because
there are no elders to counsel or channel the energy of the youngsters to a more productive one. This could be detrimental to the
country
in the long run. Another
negative
aspect, is that the history and culture of the
nation
would go into extinction. This is
because
there would not be anyone to pass down the cultural heritage to the
next
generation, who
are supposed
to be the elders in the future.
For example
, the
people
of
Abada
village, in Delta State, Nigeria, have lost the technique of healing
people
with fracture using local herbs
because
the youths have all
left
the countryside to the city for greener pastures.

In conclusion
, the benefit that the advancement in technology and the economy boost a
country
will gain if there are more young
people
residing there far outweighs any downside that
nation
may face
as a result
of fewer senior citizens.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that reading for pleasure helps develop imagination and better language skills than watching TV. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
382 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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