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At schools, students should only be taught academic knowledge to pass the exams, and skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should be learned from family and friends. To what exteny do you agree or disagree? v.1

At schools, students should only be taught academic knowledge to pass the exams, and skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should be learned from family and friends. To what exteny v. 1
Nowadays tourism is the backbone of the economy, tourism plays a vital role in interchanging the different cultures on the planet, some countries encourage the tourism for the development of the municipal area. Tourism help in lowering the unemployment rate, there is more job opening for the local people. Native public construct restaurant, hotel and the cafe on the land belonging to them. Tourist visits the local building for the food and accommodation, in turn the town citizen get business opportunities and cultural sharing with the tourist. We can see the last year data of the Switzerland where 90% of the population assign in the tourist industry. It includes the driving job, hotel manager, travel guide and contributing towards the free education. Secondly tourism is involved in the advancement of new technology, when foreigner visit the other territory they bring new ideas of cooking, work management and the gadgets which increase the curiosity in the mind of the person belonging to the ancestral land. For example, in India, former prime minister Rajiv Gandhi visited the United State of America in 1986, he deals with the chairman of American computer limited and bring the computer to India which kick-starts the technology era in India very rapidly. In addition, we cannot neglect the disadvantages of tourism, it also brings personal matters interference between the nations. In 2015 the University of Sydney research shows that 83% of the environmental degradation was caused by the tourist every year. Let's see the situation of the Manali, hill station in the Himachal Pradesh area, the tourist registration are the 20lakh last year, which is quite high, due to high density population, the top layer of snow was start melting from the mountains, thus the water level of the river is increasing dramatically. At the conclusion, the advantage has a little upper edge over the disadvantages, because tourism is the part of the country, which bring prosperity and network by linking to another realm on the earth.
Nowadays
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tourism
is the backbone of the economy,
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tourism
plays a vital role in interchanging the
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different
cultures on the planet,
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some
countries encourage the
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tourism
for the development of the municipal area.

Tourism
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help
in lowering the unemployment rate, there is more job opening for the local
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people
. Native public construct restaurant, hotel and the
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cafe
on the land belonging to them.
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Tourist
visits the local building for the food and accommodation, in turn the town citizen
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get
business opportunities and cultural sharing with the
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tourist
. We can
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see
the last year data of the Switzerland where 90% of the population assign in the
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tourist
industry. It includes the driving job, hotel manager, travel guide and contributing towards the free education.

Secondly
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tourism
is involved
in the advancement of new technology, when foreigner visit the other territory they
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bring
new
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ideas
of cooking, work management and the gadgets which increase the curiosity in the mind of the person belonging to the ancestral land.
For example
, in India, former prime minister Rajiv Gandhi visited the United State of America in 1986, he deals with the chairman of American computer limited and
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bring
the computer to India which kick-
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starts
the technology era in India
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very
rapidly
.

In addition
, we cannot neglect the disadvantages of
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tourism
, it
also
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brings
personal matters interference between the nations. In 2015 the University of Sydney research
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shows
that 83% of the environmental degradation
was caused
by the
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tourist
every year.
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Let
's
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see
the situation of the
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Manali
, hill station in the Himachal Pradesh area, the
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tourist
registration are the 20lakh last year, which is quite high, due to high density population, the top layer of snow was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
melting from the mountains,
thus
the water level of the river is increasing
dramatically
.

At the conclusion, the advantage has a
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little
upper edge over the disadvantages,
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because
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tourism
is the part of the country, which
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bring
prosperity and network by linking to another realm on the earth.
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IELTS essay At schools, students should only be taught academic knowledge to pass the exams, and skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should be learned from family and friends. To what exteny v. 1

Essay
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5 paragraphs
330 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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