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Some people say that physical education should be required part of every school day. Other believe the whole day on academic studies. Which view do you agree with use specific reasons and details to show your answer. v.1

Some people say that physical education should be required part of every school day. Other believe the whole day on academic studies. Which view do you agree with use specific reasons and details to show your answer. v. 1
There is no doubt that physical education is central to science. While some people believe that students have to take physical education during all weekdays, other people think that students should be concentrating on academic studies throughout the school day. From my viewpoint, I partially agree with this statement, and in this essay I will explain why I chose that. On the one hand, it is true that physical training should be included every day in program of school, which physical study has a vital role in academic’s journey’s students. Because that physicists study is application of mathematics which in turn represents a nightmare for every student. For example, many students hate mathematics, but when they see it that interpreting physics, they will understand very smoothly. In addition to understanding mathematics, students will appreciate both of physical and mathematical and they will address both with a high respect. On the other hand, some people believe that students should concentrate on academic studies. Which physical discipline might not represent all things, and if students took physical study every day, they may be boring and not pleased with learning physical learning. And as a result, students are not creative and clever. Another reason for considering academic teaching, is a variety of information that student gains, such as academic writing and reading, statistics analysis and human science. In conclusion, physical learning has an important role in understanding mathematics and it should give to students every day. However, physical education every day is not necessary, and it causes depression and boring for students, and for these views I partially agree with the above statement.
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education is central to science. While
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believe that
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students
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have to
take
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physical
education during all weekdays, other
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people
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think
that
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students
should be concentrating on
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academic
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studies
throughout the school day. From my viewpoint, I
partially
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agree
with this statement, and in this essay I will
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explain
why I chose that.

On the one hand, it is true that
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physical
training should
be included
every day in program of school, which
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physical
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study
has a vital role in
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academic’s
journey’s
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students
.
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that physicists
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study
is application of
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mathematics
which in turn represents a nightmare for every
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student
.
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many
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hate
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mathematics
,
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when they
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it that interpreting physics, they will understand
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very
smoothly
.
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mathematics
,
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students
will appreciate both of
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mathematical and
they will address both with a high respect.

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believe that
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students
should concentrate on
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academic
studies.

Which
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physical
discipline might not represent all things, and if
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students
took
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physical
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study
every day, they may be boring and not
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pleased
with learning
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physical
learning. And
as a result
,
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students
are not creative and clever.

Another reason for considering
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academic
teaching, is a variety of information that
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student
gains, such as
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academic
writing and reading, statistics analysis and human science.

In conclusion
,
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physical
learning has an
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important
role in understanding
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mathematics
and it should give to
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students
every day.
However
,
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physical
education every day is not necessary, and it causes depression and boring for
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students
, and for these views I
partially
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agree
with the above statement.
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IELTS essay Some people say that physical education should be required part of every school day. Other believe the whole day on academic studies. Which view do you agree with use specific reasons and details to show your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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