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Some people say that people remember special gifts or present that they receive. Why do you think that is? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Some people say that people remember special gifts or present that they receive. Why do you think that is? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Unequal distribution of wealth is one of the common problems faced by developing nations. This creates a significant gap between the wealthy and the poor and leads to many socioeconomic problems. Economic disparity not only affects the lives of the people, but also hinders the overall economic development of a nation. The government should always strive towards minimizing this gap. If we look at the problems caused by this phenomenon, we will find a number of issues. One of the main problems caused by unequal distribution of wealth is that education has become inaccessible to the poor. Nowadays quality education has become very expensive. There are A-list schools and colleges which are very costly and not within the reach of poor people. Due to this, these people are not able to compete for high paying jobs and it becomes a fundamental disadvantage for them. Another important issue is the increase in crime rates. As marginalized groups most often do not make enough money to meet their basic needs, they resort to heinous acts like burglary, theft etc. Although these issues are critical, it is possible to find solutions. In fact, there are various instances where solutions have been provided by the government itself. Firstly, the government should develop schemes and provide scholarships, which will help people from the poor section afford a quality education. This will give them a fair chance to compete with rich people. Reserving seats for marginalized group or quota system can also be one of the solutions. In addition, authorities should encourage and endeavour entrepreneurship among underprivileged sects. The government of India, for example, has introduced many schemes to empower the poor. While poverty is still an issue in the country, the life standards of the poor are increasing slowly. To sum up, the gap between the rich and the poor is widening and has created many problems like an increase in crime rates. However, if the government exercises enough political willpower, it is possible to solve these problems.
Unequal distribution of wealth is one of the common
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problems
faced by developing nations. This creates a significant gap between the wealthy and the
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poor
and leads to
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many
socioeconomic
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problems
. Economic disparity not
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only
affects the
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lives
of the
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people
,
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but
also
hinders the
overall
economic development of a nation. The
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government
should always strive towards minimizing this gap. If we look at the
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problems
caused by this phenomenon, we will find a number of issues.

One of the main
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problems
caused by unequal distribution of wealth is that education has become inaccessible to the
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poor
. Nowadays quality education has become
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very
expensive. There are A-list schools and colleges which are
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very
costly and not within the reach of
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poor
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people
. Due to this, these
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people
are not able to compete for high paying jobs and it becomes a fundamental disadvantage for them. Another
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important
issue is the increase in crime rates. As marginalized groups most
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often
do not
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make
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enough
money to
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meet
their basic needs, they resort to heinous acts like burglary, theft etc.

Although these issues are critical, it is possible to find solutions. In fact, there are various instances where solutions have
been provided
by the
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government
itself.
Firstly
, the
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government
should develop schemes and provide scholarships, which will
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help
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people
from the
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poor
section afford a quality education. This will give them a
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fair
chance to compete with rich
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people
. Reserving seats for marginalized group or quota system can
also
be one of the solutions.
In addition
, authorities should encourage and
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endeavour
entrepreneurship among underprivileged sects. The
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government
of India,
for example
, has introduced
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many
schemes to empower the
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poor
. While poverty is
still
an issue in the country, the life standards of the
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poor
are increasing
slowly
.

To sum up, the gap between the rich and the
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poor
is widening and has created
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many
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problems
like an increase in crime rates.
However
, if the
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government
exercises
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enough
political willpower, it is possible to solve these
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problems
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that people remember special gifts or present that they receive. Why do you think that is? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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