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People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Environment protection has always been a moot topic. For their own benefits, humans are damaging the environment on a large scale. To conserve the natural resources of the country, the government should come up with certain measures. In addition to this, individuals should also protect their surroundings by not misusing the resources. Natural resources like air, water, oil, wood are being exploited by humans for their own interest. Human activities are one of the major contributors to air pollution. The carbon dioxide emitted by vehicles harms the air. Moreover, the organizations release harmful gases in the habitat, which makes the air hazardous for humankind. Other ways are burning of crackers and fossil fuels and indoor activities like painting supplies, which emit toxic chemicals. Furthermore, people contaminate the water bodies as well. Factories discharge their waste into water bodies. Moreover, there are individuals who dump rubbish in inappropriate places, such as the rivers, which makes rivers toxic to marine life and eventually kill them. To fight from the harmful measures of mankind, the government should impose heavy penalties. To exemplify this, the government has banned the digging of water tanks to avoid the misuse of ground water. Another recent measure taken by the government is banning crackers. Another way is to improve public transportations. Reliable and clean public transports will encourage people to use them, instead of using private cars. We, as an individual should also take part in protecting the environment. Firstly, by discouraging deforestation. One should plant more trees to promote cleaner surroundings. Secondly, individuals should reduce household waste. For instance, people can use cloth-made-bags instead of plastic-made-bags when shopping. Thirdly, people should use more public transportation and if possible, walk more. To sum up, people damage the environment with the high usage of private cars and industrial waste, and by throwing rubbish. The Government can solve these problems by imposing penalties and enhancing public transport system. Individuals can also help by lessening their household waste and travelling by mass transports and walking.
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Environment
protection has always been a moot topic. For their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
benefits, humans are damaging the
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environment
on a large scale. To conserve the natural resources of the country, the
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government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with certain measures.
In addition
to this,
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individuals
should
also
protect their surroundings by not misusing the resources.

Natural resources like
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air
,
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water
, oil, wood are
being exploited
by humans for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
interest. Human activities are one of the major contributors to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
pollution. The carbon dioxide emitted by vehicles harms the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
.
Moreover
, the organizations release harmful gases in the habitat, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the
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air
hazardous for humankind. Other ways are burning of crackers and fossil fuels and indoor activities like painting supplies, which emit toxic chemicals.
Furthermore
,
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people
contaminate the
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water
bodies
as well
. Factories discharge their
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waste
into
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water
bodies.
Moreover
, there are
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individuals
who dump rubbish in inappropriate places, such as the rivers, which
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makes
rivers toxic to marine life and
eventually
kill them.

To fight from the harmful measures of mankind, the
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government
should impose heavy penalties. To exemplify this, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has banned the digging of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
tanks to avoid the misuse of ground
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water
. Another recent measure taken by the
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government
is banning crackers. Another way is to
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improve
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public
transportations. Reliable and clean
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public
transports will encourage
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people
to
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use
them,
instead
of using private cars.

We, as an
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individual
should
also
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take part
in protecting the
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environment
.
Firstly
, by discouraging deforestation. One should plant more trees to promote cleaner surroundings.
Secondly
,
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individuals
should
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reduce
household
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waste
.
For instance
,
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people
can
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use
cloth-made-bags
instead
of plastic-made-bags when shopping.
Thirdly
,
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people
should
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use
more
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public
transportation and if possible, walk more.

To sum up,
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people
damage the
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environment
with the high usage of private cars and industrial
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waste
, and by throwing rubbish. The
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Government
can solve these problems by imposing penalties and enhancing
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public
transport system.
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Individuals
can
also
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help
by lessening their household
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waste
and travelling by mass transports and walking.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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