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People remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

People remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
There are numerous occasions in an individual' s life to make him/her feel special. The best way to accomplish this is through gifts or presents. Therefore, these gifts are cherished forever. Firstly, gifts are means of showing love and affection towards others. For instance, due to your busy schedule you were not able to catch up with your friend since long, but you recall his/her birthday and astonish him/her with a present of his/her choice. In that case he/she will feel special and reciprocate your love in the same way. Secondly, gift given by a person who is no longer alive is always close to heart. Children treasure the presents given by their grandparents during festivals. These presents are a keepsake for them and will never like to part with them no matter how obsolete the same becomes. On the other hand, combined or joint gifts can fulfill the financial needs of an individual. For example, last year one of my friend was in need of a microwave oven, unfortunately due to limited source of income the family could not afford it. So me along with other five friends contributed for the same. Not only did it bring a smile on her face but also served her purpose. Similarly, adolescents love it when their parents and friends shower them with presents much required by them. They look forward to their birthdays and special occasions so that they can be bestowed with amazing surprises. To recapitulate, gifts represent warmth, remembrance and forgiveness. All these reasons make it even more special for the receiver as well as the giver.
There are numerous occasions in an
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make
him/her feel
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. The best way to accomplish this is through
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gifts
or
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presents
.
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are cherished
forever.

Firstly
,
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gifts
are means of showing
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love
and affection towards others.
For instance
, due to your busy schedule you were not able to catch up with your
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friend
since long,
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but
you recall his/her birthday and astonish him/her with a
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present
of his/her choice.
In that case
he/she will feel
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special
and reciprocate your
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love
in the same way
.

Secondly
,
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gift
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given
by a person who is no longer alive is always close to heart. Children treasure the
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presents
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given
by their grandparents during festivals. These
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presents
are a keepsake for them and will never like to part with them no matter how obsolete the same becomes.

On the other hand
, combined or joint
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gifts
can fulfill the financial needs of an individual.
For example
, last year one of my
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friend
was in need of a microwave oven, unfortunately due to limited source of income the family could not afford it.
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So
me along with other five
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friends
contributed for the same. Not
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only
did it bring a smile on her face
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but
also
served her purpose.

Similarly
, adolescents
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love
it when their parents and
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friends
shower them with
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presents
much required by them. They look forward to their birthdays and
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special
occasions
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so
that they can
be bestowed
with amazing surprises.

To recapitulate,
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gifts
represent warmth, remembrance and forgiveness. All these reasons
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make
it even more
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special
for the receiver
as well
as the giver.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay People remember special gifts or presents that they receive. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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