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Tourism has caused environmental problems in many parts of the world. What sort of problems has been caused and what can be done about them? v.1

Tourism has caused environmental problems in many parts of the world. What sort of problems has been caused and what can be done about them? v. 1
It is an indisputable fact that learning is one of the activities that broadens the scope of individuals in all aspects of life, but it is believed by most people that it is irrelevant to learn something of the past while living in this present time. However, others have also rallied behind the assertion that the past is equally important as current times. In my opinion, I completely disagree that studying past events and activities is valueless. First of all, to solve present situations, past solutions are actually significant. Most problems occurring now have once happened before and there were substantive measures to bring them under absolute control. So to deal with such issues of this present age, it would be expedient, we trek back to the old times to look for the possible ways, that early on, curbed a circumstance. For example, an article had it that, in 1993, a greater number of people, could not sustain their businesses because of certain reasons, but as the years drew by this problem was resolved. As a matter of fact, to combat similar situations of the present, learning about the measures used in the past moment would be helpful. Secondly, the number mistakes to be committed in certain current fraternities like the family, schools, churches, to mention but a few, would be dwindled to the bare minimum if people learn about past situations. Most of the institutions that existed some decades ago made innumerable shortcomings and were nicely documented. Going back to read about them would do a lot of good to likely groups that still live today. That is to say, we would always be conscious of them and seal any channel that might try to bring forth any of such flaws. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the assertion that studying and reading about past situations and events has no significance to those basking in the present times, because it is a panacea to cut down mistakes and deal massively with difficult predicaments of the present.
It is an indisputable fact that learning is one of the activities that broadens the scope of individuals in all aspects of life,
but
it
is believed
by most
people
that it is irrelevant to learn something of the
past
while living in this
present
time
.
However
, others have
also
rallied behind the assertion that the
past
is
equally
important
as
current
times
. In my opinion, I completely disagree that studying
past
events
and activities is valueless.

First of all
, to solve
present
situations
,
past
solutions are actually significant. Most problems occurring
now
have once happened
before
and there were substantive measures to bring them under absolute control.
So
to deal with such issues of this
present
age, it would be expedient, we trek back to the
old
times
to look for the possible ways, that early on, curbed a circumstance.
For example
, an article had it that, in 1993, a greater number of
people
, could not sustain their businesses
because
of certain reasons,
but
as the years drew by this problem
was resolved
. As a matter of fact, to combat similar
situations
of the
present
, learning about the measures
used
in the
past
moment would be helpful.

Secondly
, the number mistakes to
be committed
in certain
current
fraternities like the family, schools, churches, to mention
but
a few, would
be dwindled
to the bare minimum if
people
learn about
past
situations
. Most of the institutions that existed
some
decades ago made innumerable shortcomings and were
nicely
documented. Going back to read about them would do
a lot of
good
to likely groups that
still
live
today
.
That is
to say, we would always be conscious of them and seal any channel that might try to bring forth any of such flaws.

In conclusion
, I completely disagree with the assertion that studying and reading about
past
situations
and
events
has no significance to those basking in the
present
times
,
because
it is a panacea to
cut
down mistakes and deal
massively
with difficult predicaments of the
present
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Tourism has caused environmental problems in many parts of the world. What sort of problems has been caused and what can be done about them? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7.5
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