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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.24

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 24
With the advancements in technology, especially with the invention of gadgets like mobile and tablets, entertainment options such as movies became closer to people in the form of online platforms. But in my opinion, the best of the movie experience can only be enjoyed in theatres. Both sides of the argument will be discussed in this essay. Firstly, watching the movie on online platforms is very affordable and needs not to be a pre-planned activity. Movie watchers have a very good advantage of watching their favourite film any number of times without extra price, unlike theatres. Secondly, we can save the travelling cost and last-minute rushes by watching a movie in our own gadget. This kind of watching experience is most suitable for people who want to enjoy their movie pleasantly and in an uninterrupted way. Also, as we have an option to pause and resume available, we can watch at any pace and when we are free. On the flip side, some of the 3D effects and the greatest movie experiences can be possible only in movie theatres. For example, movies like Avatar are very good at VFX and 3D actions which can be enjoyed only in a theatre with special equipment provided. On the other hand, movie producers and directors are spending lots of money on creating a wonderful cinematic feel. They wanted to take the audience closer to the virtual reality using graphics, which can be enjoyed only on a big screen. To encourage them, we must watch those kinds of movies in the cinema theatres only. In conclusion, watching movies on a mobile has some benefits, but cannot feel the originality in terms of audio and clarity. Instead of watching them in theatres encourages the movie makers and we can enjoy the cinematic experience as well.
With the advancements in technology,
especially
with the invention of gadgets like mobile and tablets, entertainment options such as
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movies
became closer to
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people
in the form of online platforms.
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But
in my opinion, the best of the
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movie
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experience
can
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only
be enjoyed
in
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theatres
. Both sides of the argument will
be discussed
in this essay.

Firstly
, watching the
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movie
on online platforms is
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very
affordable and needs not to be a
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pre-planned
activity.
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Movie
watchers have a
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very
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good
advantage of watching their
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favourite
film any number of times without extra price, unlike
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theatres
.
Secondly
, we can save the travelling cost and last-minute rushes by watching a
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movie
in our
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own
gadget. This kind of watching
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experience
is most suitable for
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people
who want to enjoy their
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movie
pleasantly
and
Consider replacing "in an uninterrupted way" with the adverb for "uninterrupted"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an uninterrupted way
.
Also
, as we have an option to pause and resume available, we can
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watch
at any pace and when we are free.

On the flip side,
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some
of the 3D effects and the greatest
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movie
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experiences
can be possible
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only
in
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movie
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theatres
.
For example
,
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movies
like Avatar are
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very
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good
at VFX and 3D actions which can
be enjoyed
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only
in a
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theatre
with special equipment provided.
On the other hand
,
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movie
producers and directors are spending lots of money on creating a wonderful cinematic feel. They wanted to take the audience closer to the virtual reality using graphics, which can
be enjoyed
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only
on a
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big
screen. To encourage them, we
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must
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watch
those kinds of
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movies
in the cinema
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theatres
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
.

In conclusion
, watching
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movies
on a mobile has
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some
benefits,
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but
cannot feel the originality in terms of audio and clarity.
Instead
of watching them in
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theatres
encourages the
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movie
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makers and
we can enjoy the cinematic
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experience
as well
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
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