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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.18

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 18
A few individuals believe that watching the movies on the smart devices are better rather than to go to the theatre, however, others opine that it is more enjoyable to watch the films in the cinema halls. I strongly agree that, it is thrilling to see the movies on a big screen in the cinemas. On the one hand, countless people are watching the movies on the handheld devices like the mobile phones and the tablets, as it is more convenient. Furthermore, viewing the same on such devices make it less expensive, rather than to visit the cinema halls at the same moment. For instance, the service providers like the Netflix and the Amazon Prime make it more feasible for picture lovers to gaze the shows at any time and at any place. Evidently, these devices save the time and are pocket friendly for the masses. On the other hand, viewing films on a large screen provides the masses with all the features like the sound and the light effects. Moreover, spending time watching a movie in a hall rejuvenate the mind and the soul, and renders disturbing free atmosphere. For an illustration, a survey conducted by News channel shows that 80 percent of motion picture lovers like to watch movie in the cinemas, rather than to watch them on the small handheld devices. I, therefore, strongly agree with the above statement as big screens renders more thrilling environment to view the favourite flick, whose place cannot be replaced by any other device. To conclude, although gazing at the movie on devices like the mobile phones and the laptops is approachable and inexpensive, however, most of the individuals prefer to go out in the theatres to enjoy the show as it provides an altogether different atmosphere and makes it more enjoyable. It is up to the cinema lovers where to view that, whichever suits them the best.
A few individuals believe that watching the
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movies
on the smart
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devices
are better
rather
than to go to the
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theatre
,
however
, others opine that it is more enjoyable to
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watch
the films in the
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cinema
halls. I
strongly
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agree
that, it is thrilling to
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see
the
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movies
on a
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big
screen in the cinemas.

On the one hand, countless
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people
are watching the
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movies
on the handheld
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devices
like the mobile phones and the tablets, as it is more convenient.
Furthermore
, viewing the same on such
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devices
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it less expensive,
rather
than to visit the
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cinema
halls at the same moment.
For instance
, the service providers like the Netflix and the Amazon Prime
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it more feasible for picture lovers to gaze the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
at any time and at any place.
Evidently
, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
save the time and are pocket friendly for the masses.

On the other hand
, viewing films on a large screen provides the masses with all the features like the sound and the light effects.
Moreover
, spending time watching a
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movie
in a hall rejuvenate the mind and the soul, and renders disturbing free atmosphere. For an illustration, a survey conducted by News channel
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shows
that 80 percent of motion picture lovers like to
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watch
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movie
in the
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cinemas
,
rather
than to
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watch
them on the
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small
handheld devices.

I,
therefore
,
strongly
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agree
with the above statement as
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big
screens renders more thrilling environment to view the
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favourite
flick, whose place cannot
be replaced
by any other device.

To conclude
, although gazing at the
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movie
on
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devices
like the mobile phones and the laptops is approachable and inexpensive,
however
, most of the individuals prefer to go out in the
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theatres
to enjoy the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
as it provides an altogether
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different
atmosphere and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it more enjoyable. It is up to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
lovers where to view that, whichever suits them the best.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 18

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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