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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.23

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 23
Watching movies is a type of entertainment that almost everyone enjoys. With the advancement in technology, you can now easily download movies of your choice and watch them. A group of people now prefers watching it this way rather than going to the cinema. Another group believes that the experience of the large screen can't be recreated elsewhere. This essay shall discuss why it is more convenient to enjoy films on the gadget in your hand, but why the big screen is more entertaining. Firstly, the internet has given us a lot more choice to select from. There are countless options that we can choose from without any time constraint and having to go anywhere. For instance, Netflix has a list of over 100, 000 movies divided into different categories. Also, we can watch them at any time of the day or night which suits us. In contrast, going to the cinema hall is more than just the film, it is an experience, an event and an opportunity to reunite with people. To illustrate it clearly, planning the movie, making the booking and going to buy tickets. All of this allows to improve relationship with family and friends. Furthermore, we all spend a lot of time indoors with our phones or laptops, this is a good break. In conclusion, you can see more films using the new means, but you will miss the human element and the experience if you decide against going to the cinema. In my opinion, the fun of the big screen with your loved ones is many folds more.
Watching
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movies
is a type of entertainment that almost everyone enjoys. With the advancement in technology, you can
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now
easily
download
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movies
of your choice and
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watch
them. A group of
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people
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now
prefers watching it this way
rather
than going to the cinema. Another group believes that the experience of the large screen can't
be recreated
elsewhere. This essay shall discuss why it is more convenient to enjoy films on the gadget in your hand,
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but
why the
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big
screen is more entertaining.

Firstly
, the internet has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
us a lot more choice to select from. There are countless options that we can choose from without any time constraint and having to go anywhere.
For instance
, Netflix has a list of over 100, 000
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
divided into
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
categories.
Also
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
them at any time of the day or night which suits us.

In contrast
, going to the cinema hall is more than
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
the film, it is an experience, an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
and an opportunity to reunite with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. To illustrate it
clearly
, planning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
, making the booking and going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
tickets. All of this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
relationship with family and friends.
Furthermore
, we all spend
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a lot of
time indoors with our phones or laptops, this is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
break.

In conclusion
, you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
more films using the new means,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
you will miss the human element and the experience if you decide against going to the cinema. In my opinion, the fun of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
screen with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
ones is
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many
folds more.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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