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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.21

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 21
It is considered by many that with the availability of online entertainment browsing applications watching movies in theatres has become an unnecessary chore, while there are others who believe that to get the real feel and emotion movies must only be watched in a cinema hall. In my opinion, I believe that while normal films can be browsed at home, science fiction and animated presentations must definitely be watched in theatres. On one hand, many think that the access and freedom to watch a movie anywhere, anytime is a game changer in the entertainment industry. In other words, these days feature presentations, including films and television sitcoms, can be browsed from any location at any given time. Additionally, the play and pause feature gives the additional flexibility to seamlessly integrate watching pictures into a busy schedule. Moreover, the cost to browse entertainment on an electronic device, such as a phone or a tablet is economical as well. To illustrate, the expense of media browsing applications like Netflix and Amazon Prime is $12. 99 a month, which is equivalent to a movie ticket price. On the other hand, science fiction, animated presentations or films high on effects and drama should only be seen on the big screen. In other words, some motion pictures require 3D glass to watch and it would kill the whole feel, if not enjoyed and watched in a theatre. One clear example is, Christopher Nolan's Interstellar was one of the longest running and highest grossing movies of all times. Also, cinema watching, at the designated space gives an opportunity to break the monotony of the usual life and can also be considered as an avenue to meet friends. Finally, in my opinion, the decision to watch a film at home or in a theatre depends on the type of the movie that is currently running. Take the example of an animated film, it is impossible to watch it at home, while other romantic comedies can be watched at own convenience. To conclude, it depends on one's schedule and preference to get entertained. Therefore, people should choose what fits best for them.
It
is considered
by
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many
that with the availability of online entertainment browsing applications watching
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movies
in
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theatres
has become an unnecessary chore, while there are others who believe that to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the real feel and emotion
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
in a cinema hall. In my opinion, I believe that while normal films can
be browsed
at home, science fiction and animated presentations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
definitely be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
in
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theatres
.

On one hand,
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the access and freedom to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
watch
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
anywhere, anytime is a game changer in the entertainment industry. In
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
words, these days feature presentations, including films and television sitcoms, can
be browsed
from any location at any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
time.
Additionally
, the play and pause feature gives the additional flexibility to
seamlessly
integrate watching pictures into a busy schedule.
Moreover
, the cost to browse entertainment on an electronic device, such as a phone or a tablet is economical
as well
. To illustrate, the expense of media browsing applications like Netflix and Amazon Prime is $12. 99 a month, which is equivalent to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
ticket price.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, science fiction, animated presentations or films high on effects and drama should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
screen. In
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
words,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
motion pictures require 3D glass to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
watch
and it would kill the whole feel, if not enjoyed and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
in a
Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.
theatre
. One
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
example is, Christopher Nolan's Interstellar was one of the longest running and highest grossing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
of all times.
Also
, cinema watching, at the designated space gives an opportunity to break the monotony of the usual life and can
also
be considered
as an avenue to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
friends.

Finally
, in my opinion, the decision to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
watch
a film at home or in a
Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.
theatre
depends on the type of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
that is
currently
running. Take the example of an animated film, it is impossible to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
watch
it at home, while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
romantic comedies can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
convenience.
To conclude
, it depends on one's schedule and preference to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
entertained.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should choose what fits best for them.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
8
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