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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones and tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones and tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 1
Nowadays, movies can be seen on various platforms. People are divided in their opinion, while some hold the view that the use of portable electronic devices such as phones is better than going to the cinema, others believe that to have maximum satisfaction seeing a movie the cinema is better. In my opinion, the former is more enjoyable. Seeing a movie on the phone comes with great comfort and convenience. These reasons are what those in agreement with watching on phones and tablets run with. Potable gadgets can hold movies for a long period due to their storage capacity. This makes it readily available to the viewer at anytime of the day. Not only do they have autonomy to watch at a convenient time, they can also see movies at any location of their choice. For instance, I have been watching The Famous, a two hours American action film for three days without having to change my work schedule. However, those who believe that the cinema is the best place to enjoy movie do so because of the opportunity it afford people to socialize and also for its high quality image and audio. The cinema create room for individuals to meet, share views and network. They are able to get others perspective about the movie being seen. Another reason for them is the quality of image projected on the large screen accompanied with terrific audio, which allow them to feel involved. For example, last year at the Viva center, I saw a movie which made me nearly jumped out of my seat because it felt like the actor was going to shoot me. In conclusion, I believe using portable gadgets is a better way to enjoy movies because it is convenient and there is no need going to the cinema.
Nowadays,
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movies
can be
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seen
on various platforms.
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are divided
in their opinion, while
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some
hold the view that the
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use
of portable electronic devices such as phones is better than going to the
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cinema
, others believe that to have maximum satisfaction seeing a
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movie
the
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cinema
is better. In my opinion, the former is more enjoyable.

Seeing a
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movie
on the phone
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comes
with great comfort and convenience. These reasons are what those in agreement with watching on phones and tablets run with. Potable gadgets can hold
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movies
for a long period due to their storage capacity. This
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makes
it
readily
available to the viewer at anytime of the day. Not
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only
do they have autonomy to
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watch
at a convenient time, they can
also
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see
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movies
at any location of their choice.
For instance
, I have been watching The
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Famous
, a two hours American action film for three days without having to
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change
my work schedule.

However
, those who believe that the
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cinema
is the best place to enjoy
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movie
do
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so
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because
of the opportunity it
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afford
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people
to socialize and
also
for its high quality image and audio. The
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cinema
create room for individuals to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
, share views and network. They are able to
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get
others perspective about the
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movie
being
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seen
. Another reason for them is the quality of image projected on the large screen
The usual collocation for "accompany" is "by," not "with." It is better to say this: "accompanied by".
accompanied with
terrific audio, which
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allow
them to feel involved.
For example
, last year at the Viva center, I
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saw
a
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movie
which made me
nearly
jumped out of my seat
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because
it felt like the actor was going to shoot me.

In conclusion
, I believe using portable gadgets is a better way to enjoy
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movies
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because
it is convenient and there is no need going to the
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cinema
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones and tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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