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Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age, for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age, for driving cars or riding motorbikes. v. 4
The majority of the deaths are caused due to road accidents. Some people believe that increase in minimum legal age, for driving cars or riding motorbikes can avoid the majority of road accidents. I slightly agree that this is the best way to increase road safety and avoid deaths due to accidents. Firstly, dealing with the road accidents by raising the legal age limit for driving cannot results to road safety because there are many other cases such as fines and strict rules that people need to follow. For instance, many people are driving the cars and motor vehicles without driving license and other important documents. So, this leads to accidents and results to death. So, having a strict rule and fines is also a best way to solve safety issues. In contrast, parents should not encourage their children to drive vehicles until a legal age and they should restrict the speed limit in vehicles. However, there should be other programs which people need to strictly follow for their safety. For example, raising the penalty amount can help the majority of the problem as well as it also helps to identify people without driving documents with them. So, there should be a regular inspection on busy roads by traffic police is important to improve road safety. In conclusion, by the above aforementioned points, I slightly agree that increasing the minimum legal driving age is not only the best to control safety. Whereas there are many other ways that the government should implement strictly against the people who broke the traffic rules and there should be other awareness programs in schools on road safety issues and their effects on our lives
The majority of the deaths
are caused
due to
road
accidents
.
Some
people
believe that increase in minimum
legal
age
, for
driving
cars or riding motorbikes can avoid the majority of
road
accidents
. I
slightly
agree
that this is the best way to increase
road
safety
and avoid deaths due to accidents.

Firstly
, dealing with the
road
accidents
by raising the
legal
age
limit for
driving
cannot
results
to
road
safety
because
there are
many
other
cases such as fines and strict
rules
that
people
need to follow.
For instance
,
many
people
are
driving
the cars and motor vehicles without
driving
license and
other
important
documents.
So
, this leads to
accidents
and results to death.
So
, having a strict
rule
and fines is
also
a
best way to solve
safety
issues.

In contrast
, parents should not encourage their children to drive vehicles until a
legal
age and
they should restrict the speed limit in vehicles.
However
, there should be
other
programs which
people
need to
strictly
follow for their
safety
.
For example
, raising the penalty amount can
help
the majority of the problem
as well
as it
also
helps
to identify
people
without
driving
documents with them.
So
, there should be a regular inspection on busy
roads
by traffic police is
important
to
improve
road
safety.

In conclusion
, by the above aforementioned points, I
slightly
agree
that increasing the minimum
legal
driving
age
is not
only
the best to control
safety
. Whereas there are
many
other
ways that the
government
should implement
strictly
against the
people
who broke the traffic
rules
and there should be
other
awareness programs in schools on
road
safety
issues and their effects on our
lives
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age, for driving cars or riding motorbikes. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
8
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