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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.20

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 20
There is some dispute on whether there is any need to go to the cinema to enjoy movies in this era of technical advances namely computers and tabs. In my opinion, the method of entertainment people opts for, depends on individual taste and other determinants such as time and money. On the one hand, people can get entertained without needing to go to movie theatres, according to some. This is because most people think that it saves someone’s precious time and money. For example, most people claim that an individual can create his or her own set up as per their requirement, who are not having any time constraints and enjoy thoroughly. Moreover, in the age of many technological advancements, people can access a wide range of sources for watching movies just by sitting at home. Thus, need of going to the cinema for a movie seems redundant. On the other hand, it is sometimes preferred to watch movies in cinemas by some. Many hold this view because watching a movie in a theatre is not only a means of recreation, but also creates opportunities to spend quality time with friends and family. For some, watching cinemas on a laptop or other mechanical devices cannot provide the same level of enjoyment or fulfilment which a theatre can provide. For instance, a 3D motion picture can be best enjoyed on a gigantic screen with excellent sound quality. In conclusion, depending on one’s circumstances and liking, someone may select going to entertain themselves by means on theatres, while others may prefer to enjoy at home. However, I personally take comfort in going to cinemas to enjoy films.
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dispute on whether there is any need to go to the
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cinema
to
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enjoy
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movies
in this era of technical advances
namely
computers and tabs. In my opinion, the method of entertainment
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people
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opts
for, depends on individual taste and
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other
determinants such as
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time
and money.

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people
can
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get
entertained without needing to go to
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movie
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theatres
, according to
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. This is
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most
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people
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think
that it saves someone’s precious
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time
and money.
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people
claim that an individual can create
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set up as per their requirement, who are not having any
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time
constraints and
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enjoy
thoroughly
.
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, in the age of
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many
technological advancements,
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people
can access a wide range of sources for watching
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movies
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by sitting at home.
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cinema
for a
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movie
seems redundant.

On the
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other
hand, it is
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preferred to
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watch
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movies
in
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.
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hold this view
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watching a
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movie
in a
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theatre
is not
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a means of recreation,
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also
creates opportunities to spend quality
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time
with friends and family. For
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, watching
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cinemas
on a laptop or
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other
mechanical devices cannot provide the same level of enjoyment or
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fulfilment
which a
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theatre
can provide.
For instance
, a 3D motion picture can be best enjoyed on a gigantic screen with excellent sound quality.

In conclusion
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theatres
, while others may prefer to
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enjoy
at home.
However
, I
personally
take comfort in going to
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cinemas
to
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enjoy
films.
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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