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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions. v.17

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 17
In this contemporary era, technology is revolutionising every aspect of life. Watching films on personal cells is one such development. A few individuals think that, watching movies on our phones at home or any other place is better than going to movie halls specially. This essay intends to elucidate both the perspectives, followed by my opinion. At the outset, I would like to share some of the benefits, that a person can get by seeing his/her serials or series of their own mobile sets, that surely saves money of them by not visiting outside for the same. Watching movies at cinemas has become "once in a blue moon". Youth nowadays, prefer watching them in their phones, because they do not have enough time from their daily schedules, or we can say they do not know how to manage it. Moreover, they have sufficient facilities, like easy internet plans and high quality screens, everyone would prefer it besides visiting outside specially. Although, it is a good idea to save your precious time rather visiting for the events, but if we go outside with friends and celebrate the event is a different thing. To add on to the above argument, I believe that, at least this is the event that people needs to enjoy with their family and mates. It is true, that we do not have enough leisure time, but we have to manage it to know the worth of happiness. In our busy management, we have forgotten that we have a life to enjoy and a family to take care of. And this, I think that, is the best way to persuade your happiness. However, it would take your busy time, but will also provide you the real meaning of life. To recapitulate, this is explicitly that, one must have to extract some of their important time and spend on their loved ones, else we will be remain a machinery, working for our managers and offices leaving behind a beautiful life to live.
In this contemporary era, technology is
revolutionising
every aspect of life. Watching films on personal cells is one such development. A few individuals
think
that, watching movies on our phones at home or any other place is better than going to movie halls
specially
. This essay intends to elucidate both the perspectives, followed by my opinion.

At the outset, I would like to share
some of the
benefits, that a person can
get
by seeing his/her serials or series of their
own
mobile sets, that
surely
saves money of them by not visiting outside for the same. Watching movies at cinemas has become
"
once in a blue moon
"
. Youth nowadays, prefer watching them in their phones,
because
they do not have
enough
time
from their daily schedules, or we can say they do not know how to manage it.
Moreover
, they have sufficient facilities, like easy internet plans and high quality screens, everyone would prefer it
besides
visiting outside
specially
. Although, it is a
good
idea
to save your precious
time
rather
visiting for the
events
,
but
if we go outside with friends and celebrate the
event
is a
different
thing.

To
add
on to the above argument, I believe that, at least this is the
event
that
people
needs
to enjoy with their family and mates. It is true, that we do not have
enough
leisure
time
,
but
we
have to
manage it to know the worth of happiness. In our busy management, we have forgotten that we have a life to enjoy and a family to take care of. And this, I
think
that, is the best way to persuade your happiness.
However
, it would take your busy
time
,
but
will
also
provide you the real meaning of life.

To recapitulate, this is
explicitly
that, one
must
have to
extract
some
of their
important
time
and spend on their
loved
ones, else we will be
remain
a machinery, working for our managers and offices leaving behind a
beautiful
life to
live
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6.5
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