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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.10

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 10
Digital technology changed access to the seeing a film everywhere, but if we want to fill all effect and be part of the story, cinemas are right places. Many will argue that cinemas are old fashion and in today's modern world that we can watch films, in the our way without any need to go in the movie house. This essay will debate both sides and I will explain why cinema is better choice yet. Firstly, mobile devices allows us to be flexible and have the opportunity to watch movies from and bring them with us around. As an example, when we are travelling with an aeroplane, we can in advance download the films or cartoons and enjoy with them during our a flight. I can more agree that this is a very good benefit of phones or tables rather to watch a seen film's again and again. Secondly, the cinemas are best places where we can adore movie in a any segment. The Cineplex has been expanding features to attract all generations. Those are visible by different examples, water or moving chairs, same as, different sound effects and, in the last period we can fill, small as well. However, we can see a huge effort what was done bay cinematic industry to increase our pleasure. In my opinion, still cinema can provide more satisfaction than any other places. To conclude, after all Cineworld or mobile phones are good to watch movies, in different occasions we will decide rather one or another to enjoy in the movie. Modern or ancient, young or old, this all represents the contrast between mobile screens or big canvas, and personal opinion what made us happier, in the end. In my opinion, cinema cannot be replaced, yet with anything else to fulfil all satisfaction in the film.
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cinemas
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will argue that
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are
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fashion and in
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today
's modern world that we can
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films, in
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without any need to go in the
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movie
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. This essay will debate both sides and I will
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why
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is better choice
yet
.

Firstly
, mobile devices
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allows
us to be flexible and have the opportunity to
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watch
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movies
from and bring them with us around. As an example, when we are travelling with an
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aeroplane
, we can in advance download the films or cartoons and enjoy with them during our a flight. I can more
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benefit of phones or tables
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film's again and again.

Secondly
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are best places where we can adore
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movie
in
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any segment. The Cineplex has been expanding features to attract all generations. Those are visible by
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examples, water or moving chairs, same as,
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different
sound effects and, in the last period we can fill,
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as well
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, we can
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a huge effort what
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bay cinematic industry to increase our pleasure. In my opinion,
still
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cinema
can provide more satisfaction than any other places.

To conclude
,
after all
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Cineworld
or mobile phones are
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to
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, in
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occasions we will decide
rather
one or another to enjoy in the
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movie
. Modern or ancient, young or
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, this all represents the contrast between mobile screens or
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big
canvas, and personal opinion what made us happier, in the
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end
. In my opinion,
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cinema
cannot
be replaced
,
yet
with anything else to fulfil all satisfaction in the film.
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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