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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that should focus on subjects that they are good at or that they find the most interest discuss both side and give your opinion. v.11

Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that should focus on subjects that they are good at or that they find the most interest v. 11
Nowadays, folks elaborate that children should follow all school subjects, in contrast, some argue that, they should concern on the subject that they perform or like should prioritize. In my opinion, following the complete range of subjects at a primary 's is necessary. Although specifying on a subject at an academic level is vital. In short, satisfaction evolves learnings. Firstly, variety of thesis is important to create the fundamental intelligence of teenagers, while teachers make it an opportunity to identify students specific skills and shape them for the future. For example, Maths is essential for any curriculum at its academic's. As a result, students who are good at all subjects during the teenager's would perform very well at their jobs. In short, primary education persist all sorts of theories is good for shaping up good citizens. On the other hand, after ordinary level, students should concentrate on a specific category in which they are good at, indeed. As well as, their likeness will make them perform. To Illustrate, to become a doctor we have to specify in bioscience. As the subjects get complicated more time and effort has to be put into it. As a result, students have to concentrate on one subject which persist many theses. In short, subject isolation is vital for shaping up teens for their future assignments. In conclusion, early teens should be exposed to multiple fundamentals while the later part in subject isolation is better at progression. In my view, parents and teachers should work together To identify their children's ability. In a word, success relies on our interpersonal skills.
Nowadays, folks elaborate that children should follow all school
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subjects
,
in contrast
,
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some
argue that, they should concern on the
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subject
that they perform or like should prioritize. In my opinion, following the complete range of
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subjects
at a primary 's is necessary.
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Although
specifying on a
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subject
at an academic level is vital. In short, satisfaction evolves learnings.

Firstly
, variety of thesis is
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important
to create the fundamental intelligence of
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teenagers
, while teachers
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make
it an opportunity to identify
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students
specific
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skills
and shape them for the future.
For example
,
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Maths
is essential for any curriculum at its academic's.
As a result
,
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students
who are
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good
at all
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subjects
during the
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teenager
's would perform
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very
well at their jobs. In short, primary education persist all sorts of theories is
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good
for shaping up
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good
citizens.

On the other hand
, after ordinary level,
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students
should concentrate on a specific category in which they are
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good
at,
indeed
.
As well
as, their likeness will
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make
them perform. To Illustrate, to become a doctor we
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have to
specify in bioscience. As the
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subjects
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get
complicated more time and effort
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has to
be put
into it.
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,
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students
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have to
concentrate on one
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subject
which persist
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many
theses. In short,
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subject
isolation is vital for shaping up teens for their future assignments.

In conclusion
, early teens should
be exposed
to multiple fundamentals while the later part in
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subject
isolation is better at progression.
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In
my view, parents and teachers should work together To identify their children's ability.
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In
a word, success relies on our interpersonal
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skills
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that should focus on subjects that they are good at or that they find the most interest v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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