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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How this problem can be overcome? v.1

Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How this problem can be overcome? v. 1
Majority of population find it tough to balance their office work and personal and family life. There are lots of reasons for this unbalance life such as longer working hours, work load, improper working practices etc. However, these problems can be tackled by proper time management, adopting set working practices such as 3M and six-sigma, priority decisions etc. Most of the employee’s face this critical problem of unbalanced working style which compromises a lot of other counterpart of life. Nowadays, organization setting a lot of pressure on employee’s in order to meet their targets and market demands. This phenomenon leads to longer work time, fatigue is common problem due to extra working hours and finally this will result in less efficiency and productivity at work. For example, Japanese people and their work culture are known for their hard work and extremely longer period of working hours. They spend their around 75% life in work only, in addition to this due to work fatigue many of them were found dead on their desk at office. Nevertheless, this issue can be resolved by accepting and following proper work ethics and managements tools. Setting appropriate working hours, following time and work management tools such as six-sigma, 3M. People need to understand and decide their priorities to balance their life in order to spend time with friends and family. For example, The Tata organization in India initiated time management and focused on efficient working practices in order to minimize working hours by adopting PMP tool at Pune. Then, employees were interviewed and found that they have more time for their other life events and priorities. In conclusion, there are many reasons why people are unable to balance their lives but this problem can be resolved by adopting proper working techniques and practices. At the end of the day, it is so important to balance work and other part of life.
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their office
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and personal and family
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. There are lots of reasons for this unbalance
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life
such as longer
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working
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hours
,
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load, improper
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working
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time
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management
, adopting set
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working
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practices
such as 3M and six-sigma, priority decisions etc.

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problem
of unbalanced
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working
style which compromises
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a lot of
other counterpart of
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life
. Nowadays, organization setting
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a lot of
pressure on employee’s in order to
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meet
their targets and market demands. This phenomenon leads to longer
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work
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time
, fatigue is common
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problem
due to extra
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working
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and
finally
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.
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, Japanese
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people
and their
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culture
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and
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working
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. They spend their around 75%
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fatigue
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of them
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Nevertheless
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be resolved
by accepting and following proper
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ethics and
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managements
tools. Setting appropriate
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working
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hours
, following
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time
and
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work
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tools such as six-sigma, 3M.
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their
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life
in order to spend
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time
with friends and family.
For example
, The Tata organization in India initiated
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time
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management
and focused on efficient
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working
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practices
in order to minimize
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working
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hours
by adopting PMP tool at Pune. Then, employees
were interviewed
and found that they have more
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time
for their other
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life
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events
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lives
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by adopting proper
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techniques and
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. At the
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IELTS essay Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How this problem can be overcome? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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