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Q. Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cites today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved. Introduction. A. Effective transportation has been a major problem in urban communities. A lot of reasons how have been given for this delays which we will be looking at and possible way out. v.1

Q. Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cites today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved. Introduction. A. Effective transportation has been a major problem in urban communities. A lot of reasons how have been given for this delays which we will be looking at and possible way out. v. 1
In recent times, a greater number of people prefer purchasing things, such as reading materials, food items and air tickets, online. I believe that this has more drawbacks than benefits. The advantage online shopping chiefly provides is ease of access and less expenditure of energy. If a person had to travel miles to get to an outdoor market to purchase groceries he or she needs, that stress is significantly reduced with online shopping seeing they could access the shopping site with more ease on their electronic device, make purchases and have the goods delivered to their doorstep. This way, less energy is consumed on shopping and could be spent on other productive ventures at home. However, despite this, there are more disadvantages with purchasing items on the Internet. Firstly, the risk of getting the wrong item while buying another of choice is a huge detriment and one that happens quite often. For example, one could have ordered for a size-45 shoe after having seen the image displayed on the source’s website only to receive a size-40 or less. This common error makes the customer disgruntled and unsatisfied and may lead to more expenses as new orders are placed while standing the risk of having the item go out of stock. In addition to this, online scams and internet frauds are further drawbacks with buying items online. Fraudsters have found ways of stealing money from online shoppers by picking sensitive information left from their credit card on unsecure shopping sites. With the ever increasing number of online shops available, few pay little attention to web security leaving their customers at the mercy of scammers. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that although there are some benefits to online shopping, they are outweighed by the disadvantages. it provides little satisfaction due to common errors in size of goods delivered and it also exposes customers to fraud.
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people
prefer purchasing things, such as reading materials, food
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items
and air tickets,
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online
. I believe that this has more drawbacks than benefits.

The advantage
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shopping
chiefly
provides is
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ease
of access and less expenditure of energy. If a person had to travel miles to
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get
to an outdoor market to
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purchase
groceries he or she needs, that
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stress
is
significantly
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reduced
with
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online
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shopping
seeing they could access the
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shopping
site with more
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ease
on their electronic device,
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make
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purchases
and have the
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goods
delivered to their doorstep. This way, less energy
is consumed
on
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shopping
and could
be spent
on other productive ventures at home.

However
, despite this, there are more disadvantages with purchasing
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items
on the Internet.
Firstly
, the
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risk
of getting the
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wrong
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item
while buying another of choice is a huge detriment and one that happens quite
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often
.
For example
, one could have ordered for a size-45 shoe after having
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seen
the image displayed on the source’s website
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only
to receive a size-40 or less. This common error
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makes
the customer disgruntled and unsatisfied and may lead to more expenses as new orders
are placed
while standing the
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risk
of having the
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item
go out of stock.

In addition
to this,
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online
scams and internet frauds are
further
drawbacks with buying
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items
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online
. Fraudsters have found ways of stealing money from
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online
shoppers by picking sensitive information
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left
from their credit card on unsecure
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shopping
sites. With the
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ever increasing
number of
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online
shops available, few pay
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little
attention to web security leaving their customers at the mercy of scammers.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that although there are
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some
benefits to
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online
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shopping
, they
are outweighed
by the disadvantages.
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it
provides
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little
satisfaction due to common errors in size of
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delivered and it
also
exposes customers to fraud.
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IELTS essay Q. Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cites today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved. Introduction. A. Effective transportation has been a major problem in urban communities. A lot of reasons how have been given for this delays which we will be looking at and possible way out. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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