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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 2
An education plays vital role in everyone’s life, it is commonly believed by some people that, the university study is very important in order to get an appropriate job. However, others think gaining work experience and development of skills is more important. In my opinion, both have their own positives and negatives, but an education is essential under any circumstances. The majority of people complete their graduation and masters from the university to secure an employment. Most of the MNC’s and mid-small scale industries hire new employees from the universities and colleges. In addition to this, it is feasible to understand and gain practical knowledge after the studies. With proper education it is very easy to understand the work while employed in real world scenarios. Why the graduation is so important? We can understand by this example, people with adequate experience and skills set, but without an education cannot promote on higher positions as well as they never considered for bigger salaries because, market demands the education. On the other hand, gaining an experience and learning new skills is essential. It is so important to understand work which is only possible by gaining practical understanding and developing skill sets. Practical knowledge makes things easy to understand and enhances abilities which can be used in real time. Why some people believe that the experience is important? This example will elaborate clearly; every day new challenges are taken on chin by project/industrial engineers. In order to face those situations and provide feasible solutions requires an experience and skills. In conclusion, gaining the proper experience and learning new skills is so important in the real employment practices. However, without an education, there is less individual growth in terms of self-development and career opportunities. The experience can be gained after completing college or university education.
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get
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, others
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think
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gaining
work
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experience
and development of
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skills
is more
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important
. In my opinion, both have their
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positives and negatives,
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but
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education
is essential under any circumstances.

The majority of
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people
complete their graduation and masters from the
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university
to secure an employment. Most of the
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MNC
’s and mid-
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small
scale industries hire
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new
employees from the
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universities
and colleges.
In addition
to this, it is feasible to
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understand
and gain practical knowledge after the studies. With proper
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education
it is
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very
easy to
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understand
the work while employed in real world scenarios. Why the graduation is
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important
? We can
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by this example,
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people
with adequate
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experience
and
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skills
set,
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but
without an
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education
cannot promote on higher positions
as well
as they never considered for bigger salaries
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because
, market demands the education.

On the other hand
,
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gaining
an
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experience
and learning
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new
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skills
is essential. It is
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so
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important
to
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work which is
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only
possible by
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gaining
practical understanding and developing
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skill
sets. Practical knowledge
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makes
things easy to
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understand
and enhances abilities which can be
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used
in real time. Why
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some
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people
believe that the
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experience
is
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important
? This example will elaborate
clearly
; every day
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new
challenges
are taken
on chin by project/industrial engineers. In order to face those situations and provide feasible solutions requires an
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experience
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

In conclusion
,
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gaining
the proper
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experience
and learning
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new
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skills
is
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so
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important
in the real employment practices.
However
, without an
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education
, there is less individual growth in terms of self-development and career opportunities. The
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experience
can
be gained
after completing college or
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university
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education
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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