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Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience v.1

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. 1
Some people say that in the modern world, it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. One of the biggest problems in many parts of the world today is that of unhealthy lifestyles and the effects that unhealthy lifestyles have on people and society. It is not an issue for a personal issue of anyone but rather a social and medical one. For a part of people, it is easy to develop an unhealthy lifestyle. They spend most of their day sitting at desks at work, starting a sedentary working life. In fact, this has become increasingly true of people over the day, because jobs that used to involve physical movement have been replaced by computer-assisted jobs. Another reason is that a growing number of people use their cars for every single journey instead of walking sometimes. Doing very little exercise like this way only brings in a poor health condition. And many people, in particular young people, spend a field of their free day sitting down and looking at computer screens, doing nothing meaningful, but watching movies or playing computer games all the point instead of going out and doing sport and taking exercise. Food is another issue because nowadays young people seem to enjoy junk food, which offers them little nutritional value. People are very aware of this problem and they want to keep fit and stay in shape. In most places, it is not difficult to do this successfully. There are gyms, fitness centre where people can join, and plenty of individuals are doing this. In additional, there is abundant information about what to eat, and it is by no means expensive to feed ourselves with healthy food. The whole subject gets a piece of publicity in the media and consequently many people find it both enjoyable and affordable to stay healthy. In conclusion, it is easy for a piece of people has unhealthy lifestyles and this can cause medical problems because they can eventually require any medical treatment, which is even costlier than shopping for healthy and organic foods. On the other hand, it is not at all impractical for people to avoid these problems by submerging in regular physical activities.
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problems
in
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parts of the world
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today
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unhealthy
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lifestyles
and the effects that
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unhealthy
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lifestyles
have on
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people
and society. It is not an issue for a personal issue of anyone
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but
rather
a social and medical one.

For a part of
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people
, it is easy to develop an
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
. They spend most of their day sitting at desks at work, starting a sedentary working life. In fact, this has become
increasingly
true of
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people
over the day,
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because
jobs that
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used
to involve physical movement have
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by computer-assisted jobs.

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people
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use
their cars for every single journey
instead
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exercise like this way
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brings in a poor health condition. And
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many
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people
,
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young
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, spend a field of their free day sitting down and looking at computer screens,
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nothing meaningful,
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watching movies or playing computer games all the point
instead
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sport and taking exercise.
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is another issue
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seem to enjoy junk
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food
, which offers them
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little
nutritional value.

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problem and
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fit and stay in shape. In most places, it is not difficult to do this
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where
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can
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join
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plenty
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doing
this. In additional, there is abundant information about what to eat, and it is by no means expensive to feed ourselves with
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healthy
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food
. The whole subject
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gets
a piece of publicity in the media and
consequently
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many
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people
find it both enjoyable and affordable to stay healthy.

In conclusion
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people
has
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unhealthy
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lifestyles
and this can cause medical
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problems
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because
they can
eventually
require any medical treatment, which is even costlier than shopping for
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healthy
and organic
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foods
.
On the other hand
, it is not at all impractical for
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people
to avoid these
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problems
by submerging in regular physical activities.
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IELTS essay Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
396 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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