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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.17

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 17
A bad position or try to improve? Some people thought that if you have an unsatisfying business or low salary, It's better to accept it. But some others believe that everyone should get better own circumstances. Some people argue about this position at an office that even your work does not satisfy you, or the salary is not enough, it's better to keep it, because finding a new appointment or occupation is very difficult. It could be true because many countries in the world have a big issue with unemployed population. Furthermore, many countries have been faced to refugees and migrations that lead to low cast human resource and if you lose your assignment, you cannot find a new one. On the other hand, companies normally try to find the employee who cares about improving the organization and his/her work. It's a good point for an employee. However, at the same time the employer should answer to this kind of creation and increase the employee's salary, if not, I believe that this worker should leave his/her task. In addition, people should not afraid to quit their job, it's a challenge and maybe it leads to the new start in self-employment for this person. Unfortunately, many people prefer to keep their work and everyday think about that I do not want this position or nagging about that. Moreover, I believe that people can start a new activity, hobby or occupation at the same time and enjoy their life in this way. In conclusion, staying in a bad seat with shortage money or unsatisfactory struggle is like a nightmare. I believe that if anyone can improve the position, should do it, if not, it's better to find a new task with his/her interests, even find another activity and do the business with a bad area and try to do what he/she wants in free time.
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or try to
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thought
that if you have an unsatisfying business or low salary,
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better
to accept it.
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some
others
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that everyone should
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get
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better
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own
circumstances.

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people
argue about this
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position
at an office that even your work does not satisfy you, or the salary is not
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enough
,
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it's
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better
to
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keep
it,
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finding a
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new
appointment or occupation is
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difficult. It could be true
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because
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countries in the world have a
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issue with unemployed population.
Furthermore
,
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countries have
been faced
to refugees and migrations that lead to low cast human resource and if you lose your assignment, you cannot
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find
a
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new
one.

On the other hand
,
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companies
normally
try to
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find
the employee who cares about improving the organization and his/her work.
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It's
a
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good
point for an employee.
However
, at the same time the employer should answer to this kind of creation and increase the employee's salary, if not, I
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believe
that this worker should
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leave
his/her task.
In addition
,
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people
should not afraid to quit their job,
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it's
a challenge and maybe it leads to the
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new
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start
in self-employment for this person. Unfortunately,
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many
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people
prefer to
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their work and everyday
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think
about that I do not want this
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or nagging about that.
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, I
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that
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people
can
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start
a
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new
activity, hobby or occupation at the same time and enjoy their life in this way.

In conclusion
, staying in a
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bad
seat with shortage money or unsatisfactory struggle is like a nightmare. I
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believe
that if anyone can
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improve
the
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position
, should do it, if not,
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it's
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better
to
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find
a
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new
task with his/her interests, even
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find
another activity and do the business with a
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bad
area and try to do what he/she wants in free time.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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