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In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience. (Write at least 250 words) v.1

In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience. () v. 1
Myriad innovations have changed the feature of transportation system during last two centuries, but I suppose that the invention of air planes has had the most considerable effect on transportation system. In the rest of this essay, I present two remarkable changes which has happened after air planes inventing. First of all, mankind had a dream of flying before invention of the plane which came true after air plane invention. The exotic feeling which is experienced during flying in the sky is mysterious. For instance, I never forget my first experience of air travel and the picture of sunrise in the window while the plane was passing through the clouds at a height of approximately 3000 feet above the sea level. In addition, air trips have been the most popular type of travel all over the world which is performed significantly faster than the others. The planes speed is very high and their routes are straight, thus they get to their destination rapidly. Air transportation system declines the travel time impressively and it brought all parts of the earth closer together. For example, these days traveling from Asia to America take place by plane in less than a day while more than two months are required to travel this distance by a ship. To conclude, as mentioned above, I believe that the air planes is the most important innovation in transportation sector. The exciting feeling and amazing views which are visible from the plane window are interesting for passengers while this kind of transportation means are wonderfully fast.
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changed
the feature of
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transportation
system during last two centuries,
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but
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air
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planes
has had the most considerable effect on
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transportation
system. In the rest of this essay, I present two remarkable
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changes
which has happened after
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air
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planes
inventing.

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First of all
, mankind had a dream of flying
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before
invention of the
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plane
which came true after
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air
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plane
invention. The exotic feeling which
is experienced
during flying in the sky is mysterious.
For instance
, I never forget my
first
experience of
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air
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travel
and the picture of sunrise in the window while the
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plane
was passing through the clouds at a height of approximately
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3000 feet
above the sea level.

In addition
,
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air
trips have been the most popular type of
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travel
all over the world which
is performed
significantly
faster than the others. The
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planes
speed is
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very
high and their routes are straight,
thus
they
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get
to their destination
rapidly
.
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Air
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transportation
system declines the
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travel
time
impressively
and it brought all parts of the earth closer together.
For example
, these days traveling from Asia to America take place by
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plane
in less than a day while more than two months
are required
to
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travel
this distance by a ship.

To conclude
, as mentioned above, I believe that the
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air
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planes
is the most
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important
innovation in
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transportation
sector. The exciting feeling and amazing views which are visible from the
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plane
window are interesting for passengers while this kind of
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transportation
means are
wonderfully
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fast
.
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16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience. () v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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