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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.6

While recruiting many organizations inquiry about person well-being like marital status, pastime and intrigue activities. Merits and merits of same will be illustrated below with example. There are mainly three reason why companies ask for personal information, first they are trying to get person upbringing. Second, from hobbies they will predict person nature and whether a person will be useful asset for their firm. Third they wanted to do a risk assessment so that they do not have face consequence in future. For example, person who will be hired as software engineer must have analytical ability that is analyzing issue from different angles. Recruiters often scale person ability to solve issue from sport or leisure activities person is interested in. The other side of coin is that asking to much detail about personal aspects diverts from the actual skill set that person possess. Moreover, a valuable resource will have perception that company is more interested in hobbies than actual expertise of subject and may not in joining the organization. For example, a person getting hired for position of lawyer must have adequate knowledge about that profession like various Article and new laws coming in-force. To conclude, it is important to figure out person hobbies and personal details but at same time skill set should be more advantage that personal aspects.
While recruiting
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many
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organizations
inquiry about
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person
well-being like marital status, pastime and intrigue activities. Merits and merits of same will
be illustrated
below with example.

There are
mainly
three reason why
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companies
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ask for
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personal
information,
first
they are trying to
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get
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person
upbringing. Second, from hobbies they will predict
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person
nature and whether a
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person
will be useful asset for their firm. Third they wanted to do a
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risk
assessment
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so
that they do not have face consequence
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in future
.
For example
,
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person
who will
be hired
as software engineer
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must
have analytical ability
that is
analyzing issue from
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different
angles. Recruiters
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often
scale
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person
ability to solve issue from sport or leisure
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activities
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person
is interested
in.

The other side of coin is that asking
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to
much detail about
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personal
aspects diverts from the actual
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skill
set that
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person
possess.
Moreover
, a valuable resource will have perception that
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company
is more interested in hobbies than actual expertise of subject and may not in joining the organization.
For example
, a
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person
getting hired for position of lawyer
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must
have adequate knowledge about that profession like various Article and new laws coming in-force.

To conclude
, it is
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important
to figure out
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person
hobbies and
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personal
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details
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but
at same time
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skill
set should be more advantage that
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personal
aspects.
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IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
220 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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