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Some people said that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that in all levels of education from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 3
The role of education is still widely debated nowadays, with some people claiming that too much time is spent on learning facts and theories and not sufficient on learning practical skills. I personally agree with this opinion and I will explain why in this essay. Firstly, schools should provide more subjects that are specialized in practical skills. Youngsters should be given a range of choices in terms of concentrations, major or minor and shouldn’t be limited into fact or theoretical courses. For example, school through all levels of education should provide practical courses like cooking, cleaning or basic maintainance courses. These practical courses can teach children basic living skills. While theoretical courses are important, but more essential needs for child is to learn the basic living skills and being more independently. On the other hand, balancing the time on learning practical skills can give students more choices in the future. There is always a significant amount of people that generally do not enjoy studying the theories and facts. It would be better off for those students to put more time on learning practical skills. For instance, there is a student always failing his mathematics class, but he really enjoys making coffee during his spare time. For this case, if he had more time on learning cooking or specifically making coffee, I think the advantage outweighs from studying theories and facts. Lastly, spend more time on learning practical skills can reduce the stress from schooling. Practical skills often involve more activities compared to theoretical courses. For example, cooking courses need students to wash and cook the ingredients, it involves more activities than studying finance. Activities can often release the stress from studying and it might as well improve the overall studying performance. I do understand the opposing view, which is that the education institutions should focus on teaching the facts and theories because they are hard to learn from parents or friends. Nevertheless, I feel that focusing too much on facts and theories can potentially damage the physical or mental health and personal interest of children. All in all, I believe that spending more time on practical skills is essential because it gives children more choices, help them to develop their own interest and maintain a good health.
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some
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people
claiming that too much
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time
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learning
facts and
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theories
and not sufficient on
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learning
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practical
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skills
. I
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agree
with this opinion and I will
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Firstly
, schools should provide more subjects that
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in
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practical
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skills
. Youngsters should be
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given
a range of choices in terms of concentrations, major or minor and shouldn’t
be limited
into
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fact
or theoretical
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courses
.
For example
, school through all levels of education should provide
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practical
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courses
like cooking, cleaning or basic
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maintainance
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courses
. These
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practical
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courses
can teach children basic living
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skills
. While theoretical
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courses
are
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important
,
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but
more essential needs for child is to learn the basic living
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skills
and being more
independently
.
On the other hand
, balancing the
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time
on
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learning
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practical
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skills
can give
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students
more choices in the future. There is always a significant amount of
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people
that
generally
do not enjoy
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studying
the
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theories
and facts. It would be better off for those
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students
to put more
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time
on
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learning
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practical
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skills
.
For instance
, there is a
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student
always failing his mathematics
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class
,
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but
he
really
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time
. For this case, if he had more
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time
on
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learning
cooking or
specifically
making coffee, I
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think
the advantage outweighs from
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studying
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theories
and facts.
Lastly
, spend more
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time
on
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learning
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practical
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skills
can
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reduce
the
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stress
from schooling.
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Practical
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skills
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often
involve more activities compared to theoretical
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courses
.
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, cooking
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courses
need
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students
to wash and cook the ingredients, it involves more activities than
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studying
finance. Activities can
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often
release the
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stress
from
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studying
and it might
as well
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improve
the
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studying
performance.

I do understand the opposing view, which is that the education institutions should focus on teaching the facts and
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theories
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because
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hard
to learn from parents or friends.
Nevertheless
, I feel that focusing too much on facts and
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theories
can
potentially
damage the physical or mental health and personal interest of children.

All in all, I believe that spending more
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time
on
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practical
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skills
is essential
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because
it gives children more choices,
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help
them to develop their
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own
interest and maintain a
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good
health.
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IELTS essay Some people said that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

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