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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 4
We can’t master any theory if we remain unaware of it practical implementation. Unfortunately, according to some people, our educational system, nowadays, is focusing more on the theoretical concepts and less on how to implement these theories in reality. I personally agree with this complain and this essay will discuss this by using the examples of Oxford University research and Times Magazine survey in order to demonstrate points and support claims. Firstly, our academic curriculums needs restructuring. As, our whole academic structure from teaching to the examinations value more to the facts memorization. Furthermore, this system discourages those students who have trouble memorizing anything. For example, Oxford University in 2015 researched about the benefits of memorizing the facts only and find out that it is useless, if the practical knowledge of that fact is zero. So, from this example, it is clear that a revision of all the subjects is required in order to accommodate more technical skills in the courses. Secondly, real life skills are not considered important in our institutional courses. So, such an approach leads to a negative impact when students start their professional career. Additionally, students also lose their interest in evaluating any theoretical facts in their real life. Similarly, a survey of the Times Magazine suggests the same story, that pupils are mostly interested in improving their grades by memorizing more, as technical skills are of less importance in any grading system of the world. So, from this example, it is clear that the technical skills are considered unimportant by the institutes, that’s why students also don’t like to concentrate on it. To conclude, schools and universities are spending so much of their resources, in finding the ways, which helps their students to memorize concepts faster, but very less is allocated to force students to evaluate those concepts in the real life. So, I personally agree with this and I am hopeful that in the future governments will focus more on the practical work as compared to the theoretical knowledge. So, that a more productive generation will emerge.
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some
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, our educational system, nowadays, is focusing more on the theoretical concepts and less on how to implement these theories in reality. I
personally
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agree
with this complain and this essay will discuss this by using the
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of Oxford University research and Times Magazine survey in order to demonstrate points and support claims.

Firstly
, our academic curriculums needs restructuring.
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, our whole academic structure from teaching to the examinations value more to the
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facts
memorization.
Furthermore
, this system discourages those
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students
who have trouble memorizing anything. For
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example
, Oxford University in 2015 researched about the benefits of memorizing the facts
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only
and find out that it is useless, if the practical knowledge of that
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fact
is zero.
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So
, from this
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, it is
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clear
that a revision of all the subjects
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in order to accommodate more technical
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skills
in the courses.

Secondly
, real life
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skills
are not considered
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important
in our institutional courses.
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, such an approach leads to a
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negative
impact when
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students
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start
their professional career.
Additionally
,
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students
also
lose their interest in evaluating any theoretical facts in their real life.
Similarly
, a survey of the Times Magazine suggests the same story, that pupils are
mostly
interested in improving their grades by memorizing more, as technical
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skills
are of less importance in any grading system of the world.
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So
, from this
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that the technical
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skills
are considered
unimportant by the institutes, that’s why
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students
also
don’t like to concentrate on it.

To conclude
, schools and universities are spending
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much of their resources, in finding the ways, which
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helps
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students
to memorize concepts faster,
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less
is allocated
to force
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students
to evaluate those concepts in the real life.
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, I
personally
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agree
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this and
I am hopeful that in the future
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governments
will focus more on the practical work as compared to the theoretical knowledge.
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a more productive generation will emerge.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
8.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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