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some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 2
It is generally believed that the most concentration of schools and universities are about educating scientific information to the students rather than necessary abilities which would be useful in their future lives. I tend to agree with those people as learning capable skills may lead to ensure life stability. To begin with, a great proportion of contents that students are learning are attribute to the exclusive fields. For instance, math could be an undeniable part of knowledge everyone has to be learnt for for simple calculations in case of financial issues for a living. However, advanced and complicated formulas might nit be as much essential for all persons to be familiar with and they probably are not of great importance. They might be useful for those tending to higher level education. Another point is that young people may be more passionate about acquiring and learning practical skills instead of resolving a three-dimensional equation, for example. It could be more fun to learn about how to tailor the saving practices and avoid splurging, or the simple means for troubleshooting an electronic device like a TV. People having applicable experts are exposed to a huge number of job opportunities and probably their future lives would be more secure and safer. By way of conclusion, I would agree with the argument that the educational system should add more applicable ability courses in their curriculum in terms of practicality.
It is
generally
believed that the most concentration of schools and universities are about educating scientific information to the students
rather
than necessary abilities which would be useful in their future
lives
. I tend to
agree
with those
people
as learning capable
skills
may lead to ensure life stability.

To
begin
with, a great proportion of contents that students are learning are attribute to the exclusive fields.
For instance
, math could be an undeniable part of knowledge everyone
has to
be
learnt
for for
simple calculations in case of financial issues for a living.
However
, advanced and complicated formulas might nit be as much essential for all persons to be familiar
with and
they
probably
are not of great importance. They might be useful for those tending to higher level education.

Another point is that young
people
may be more passionate about acquiring and learning practical
skills
instead
of resolving a three-dimensional equation,
for example
. It could be more fun to learn about how to tailor the saving practices and avoid splurging, or the simple means for troubleshooting an electronic device like a TV.
People
having applicable experts
are exposed
to a huge number of job opportunities and
probably
their future
lives
would be more secure and safer.

By way of conclusion, I would
agree
with the argument that the educational system should
add
more applicable ability courses in their curriculum in terms of practicality.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 2

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