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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough time on learning practical skills. v. 23

education which is a primary source for development is very important for our society. Some people believe that in all the education levels from lower school to graduation, it is found that time is spent on learning competitive subjects and not giving time to learn additional skills. however both are necessary for future prospects of life when applying for a job. it is generally thought that giving university education helps people to apply for jobs such as teacher, doctor, engineer etc. All universities mostly focus on competitive subjects like math, science, literature which helps them for upcoming competitions in jobs and increases economic development of a country. however, when applying for a business job such as management, leadership and additional skills with high experience and increased interpersonal skills plays an important role. For instance, when applied for a job of a sales person which asks for skills of attracting customers not for education. I completely believe that including practical skills subject in university education helps students to become more confident and increases communication skills, leadership’s skills and inter-personal skills required for any job applied further.

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough time on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.23

education
which is a primary source for development is
very
important
for our society.
Some
people
believe that in all the
education
levels from lower school to graduation, it
is found
that time
is spent
on learning competitive subjects and not giving time to learn additional
skills
.
however
both are necessary for future prospects of life when applying for a job.
it
is
generally
thought
that giving university
education
helps
people
to apply for jobs such as teacher, doctor, engineer etc. All universities
mostly
focus on competitive subjects like math, science, literature which
helps
them for upcoming competitions in jobs and increases economic development of a country.
however
, when applying for a business job such as management, leadership and additional
skills
with high experience and increased interpersonal
skills
plays an
important
role.
For instance
, when applied for a job of a sales person which
asks for
skills
of attracting customers not for education. I completely believe that including practical
skills
subject in university
education
helps
students to become more confident and increases communication
skills
, leadership’s
skills
and inter-personal
skills
required for any job applied
further
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
4 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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