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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.11

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 11
There is no doubt that theoretical knowledge is the foundation of education. Several people argue that plenty of time is wasted on teaching the theoretical portion of studies rather than the practical skills. In my opinion, it is true. Today, at all the levels of education that is for primary schools to tertiary, students are asserted to cram theories and other facts about the knowledge. For example, the subject chemistry at the school level is designed in such a way, that it requires the readers to blindly follow the textbooks by memorizing the chemical compositions and remembering the reaction chains, rather than allowing them to perform themselves and observe the results. Moreover, the students feel inundated due to an abundance of information. Hence, it resists the growth of new ideas and makes them like a frog in a well. On the other hand, some short sighted people believe that it is necessary for the students to gain knowledge from books. The activities which have been already performed in the past are not necessarily required to perform again. Hence, it’s a waste of time and material, letting the students do those things practically again. However, showing the information written in books helps them to understand concepts much easier and quickly rather than going through long procedures. Therefore, it’s better to spend extra time on teaching facts, over asking them to practically perform. In conclusion, I firmly believe that memorizing the concepts from books, overwhelmingly suppresses the mind and rise of new thoughts which results in narrowing the knowledge and limiting the complex ideas from rising.
There is no doubt that theoretical
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knowledge
is the foundation of education. Several
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people
argue that
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plenty
of time
is wasted
on teaching the theoretical portion of studies
rather
than the practical
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skills
. In my opinion, it is true.

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Today
, at all the levels of education
that is
for primary schools to tertiary,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
are asserted
to cram theories and other facts about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
.
For example
, the subject chemistry at the school level
is designed
in such a way, that it requires the readers to
blindly
follow the textbooks by memorizing the chemical compositions and remembering the reaction chains,
rather
than allowing them to perform themselves and observe the results.
Moreover
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
feel inundated due to an abundance of information.
Hence
, it resists the growth of new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them like a frog in a well.

On the other hand
,
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some
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short sighted
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people
believe that it is necessary for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to gain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
from books. The activities which have been already performed in the past are not
necessarily
required to perform again.
Hence
, it’s a waste of time and material, letting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
do those things
practically
again.
However
, showing the information written in books
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them to understand concepts much easier and
quickly
rather
than going through long procedures.
Therefore
, it’s better to spend extra time on teaching facts, over asking them to
practically
perform.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that memorizing the concepts from books,
overwhelmingly
suppresses the mind and rise of new thoughts which results in narrowing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
and limiting the complex
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
from rising.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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