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Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. v. 2
The benefits of having a supportive partner surpasses that of many associates in one's life. I quite agree that one loyal colleague gives the needed motivation and understanding than a good number of contacts. The support to push through life is essential to our survival. A good friend will always find the best words and actions to encourage and ensure we succeed together. This assistance may be in terms of finance, advice, career, for family or education. For example, someone who provides help to learning a trade, and at the same time serves as guarantor for him while undergoing the training. Meanwhile, the ally is also there to ensure after completion of the training, he was able to start and stand on his own. Everyone needs a sincere and trustworthy companion to share thoughts and views with. An intimate close confidant who has a listening ear and always one run to a person, he/she will keep what's secret, provide necessary and needed help, at the same time stand with his/her alter ego through thick and thin. An ally who can shield a colleague from embarrassment, debt, cloth or shelter him/her for a while. Someone who does not expose the affairs of the person. For instance, seeking an advice on seeking for a new job, career change, immigration or further studies can only be shared with a true friend. In conclusion, having a close confidant in many ways outweighs walking with a good number of acquaintances in this life and I strongly agree that the role just one companion plays is unmatched by the thousands of other associates.
The benefits of having a supportive partner surpasses that of
many
associates in one's life. I quite
agree
that one loyal colleague gives the needed motivation and
understanding
than a
good
number of contacts.

The support to push through life is essential to our survival. A
good
friend will always find the best words and actions to encourage and ensure we succeed together. This assistance may be in terms of finance, advice, career, for family or education.
For example
, someone
who
provides
help
to learning a trade, and at the same time serves as guarantor for him while undergoing the training. Meanwhile, the
ally
is
also
there to ensure after completion of the training, he was able to
start
and stand on his
own
.

Everyone needs a sincere and trustworthy companion to share thoughts and views with. An intimate close confidant
who
has a listening ear and always one run to a person, he/she will
keep
what's secret, provide necessary and needed
help
, at the same time stand with his/her alter ego through thick and thin. An ally
who
can shield a colleague from embarrassment, debt, cloth or shelter him/her for a while. Someone
who
does not expose the affairs of the person.
For instance
, seeking
an advice
on seeking for a new job, career
change
, immigration or
further
studies can
only
be shared
with a true friend.

In conclusion
, having a close confidant in
many
ways outweighs walking with a
good
number of acquaintances in this life and I
strongly
agree
that the role
just
one companion plays
is unmatched
by the thousands of other associates.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government but others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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