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people do many tasks to improve their natural environment. which of the following tasks do you prefer and why? 1. plant trees and make parks2. using fewer plastic bags when shopping3. use public transportation v.1

people do many tasks to improve their natural environment. which of the following tasks do you prefer and why? 1. plant trees and make parks2. using fewer plastic bags when shopping3. use public transportation v. 1
A group of people believes that children should learn to compete, whereas many people oppose the view and according to them, working together is more important than competing for young generation, in order to be successful in life. In my opinion, pairing off and collaboration should be in harmony, that means, children's should know when to compete and where they should co-operate. If we want our children to achieve their goals in education and extra-curricular activities. They should develop the habit of positive competition. Children's minds are like sponges, they can absorb, whatever they have been taught for example, School is the place, where children start learning how to compete in different situations, and teachers play a vital role in this development. Teacher are like mentors for their students, because they always try to follow their footsteps. The Championship should always be positive, if a rat race among class fellows lead them towards jealousy and hatred, this may have detrimental effects on their abilities and behaviours. Furthermore, facilitation is also an important aspect of children's learning and development process. It is obvious that schools are the foundations for learning the basic co-operation skills, however, parents can also educate their children's to be helpful to everyone for example, minors are taught to share their belongings with their age fellows, so that they can learn to support. It is commonly observed that parents often try to increase the reinforcement and candidacy, among siblings, because these two behaviours are equally essential for the well-being of youngsters. By simplifying, I conclude, that cooperation and competition are both key elements in child development. However, its parents and teachers, responsibility to make sure that children's are using these traits at the right place.
A group of
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people
believes that children should learn to compete, whereas
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many
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people
oppose the view and according to them, working together is more
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important
than competing for young generation, in order to be successful in life. In my opinion, pairing off and collaboration should be in harmony, that means,
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children's
should know when to compete and where they should co-operate.

If we want our children to achieve their goals in education and extra-curricular activities. They should develop the habit of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
competition.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Children's
minds are like sponges, they can absorb, whatever they have
been taught
for example
, School is the place, where children
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start
learning how to compete in
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different
situations, and teachers play a vital role in this development. Teacher are like mentors for their students,
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because
they always try to follow their footsteps. The Championship should always be
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positive
, if a rat race among
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class
fellows lead them towards jealousy and hatred, this may have detrimental effects on their abilities and
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behaviours
.

Furthermore
, facilitation is
also
an
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important
aspect of
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children's
learning and development process. It is obvious that schools are the foundations for learning the basic co-operation
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skills
,
however
, parents can
also
educate their
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children's
to be helpful to everyone
for example
, minors
are taught
to share their belongings with their age fellows,
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so
that they can learn to support. It is
commonly
observed that parents
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often
try to increase the reinforcement and candidacy, among siblings,
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because
these two
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviours' is British English.
behaviours
are
equally
essential for the well-being of youngsters.

By simplifying, I conclude, that cooperation and competition are both key elements in child development.
However
, its parents and teachers, responsibility to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children's
are using these traits at the right place.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay people do many tasks to improve their natural environment. which of the following tasks do you prefer and why? 1. plant trees and make parks2. using fewer plastic bags when shopping3. use public transportation v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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