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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Playing sports can teach people lessons about life v.1

Playing sports can teach people lessons about life v. 1
Some people have an opinion about the importance of giving gifts and presents to relatives as a form of our care for them, while others disagree. I definitely agree with the opinion that there are better alternatives to do so. According to “The Five Love Languages”, a book written about love language, there are actually five different ways how people like to express their love to others. They are gifts, quality time, words of affirmation, act of services or devotion, and physical touch. From these five love languages, usually two of them are more prominent than others. Obviously, the language that we primarily prefer to demonstrate our attention to our love one is the one that we will appreciate the most when we received one. For instance, my dominant love language is quality time. Therefore, I will be over the moon when my friend would spend their Saturday morning exchanging our life story offer coffee. On the other hand, my spouse whose main love language is gift, he would be on cloud nine whenever he received a birthday present from his relatives. Although I am not going to lie, regardless of our primary love language, the excitement of opening crisp wrapping paper covering a gift thoughtfully prepared by our friends will surely bring a ray of sunshine to our special day. That is why it is becoming a popular believe in society that giving gifts and presents are important. In conclusion, there are different approaches to express our care to others. Though giving gift being one of the essence, it is not the only way. In my opinion, if we are able to catch what is the prime love language of the recipient, they will be extremely thrilled to receive it.
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people
have an opinion about the importance of giving
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gifts
and presents to relatives as a form of our care for them, while others disagree. I definitely
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agree
with the opinion that there are better alternatives to do
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so
.

According to “The Five
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Love
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Languages”
, a book written about
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love
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language
, there are actually five
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different
ways how
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people
like to express their
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love
to others. They are
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gifts
, quality time, words of affirmation, act of services or devotion, and physical touch. From these five
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love
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languages
,
usually
two of them are more prominent than others.

Obviously
, the
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language
that we
primarily
prefer to demonstrate our attention to our
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love one
is the one that we will appreciate the most when we received one.
For instance
, my dominant
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love
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language
is quality time.
Therefore
, I will be over the moon when my friend would spend their Saturday morning exchanging our life story offer coffee. On the
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other
hand, my spouse whose main
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love
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language
is
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gift
, he would be on cloud nine whenever he received a birthday present from his relatives.

Although I am not going to lie, regardless of our primary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
love
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
, the excitement of opening crisp wrapping paper covering a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
thoughtfully
prepared by our friends will
surely
bring a ray of sunshine to our special day.
That is
why it is becoming a popular believe in society that giving
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gifts
and presents are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
.

In conclusion
, there are
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different
approaches to express our care to others. Though giving
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gift
being one of the essence, it is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way. In my opinion, if we are able to catch what is the prime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
love
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
of the recipient, they will be
extremely
thrilled to receive it.
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IELTS essay Playing sports can teach people lessons about life v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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