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Some people say that family has the most powerful influence in a child's development. Other's say that other factors such as (television, friend, music etc. ) play a greater role today. Discuss + and -. v.1

Some people say that family has the most powerful influence in a child's development. Other's say that other factors such as (television, friend, music etc. ) play a greater role today. Discuss + and -. v. 1
In recent decades, there has been a major debate on whether gasoline powered vehicles should be banned, and on whether electric vehicles should replace them. Personally, I strongly advocate the ban on fossil fuel powered cars and electric cars replacing them. This essay will discuss how air pollution and the decreasing quantity of fossil fuels supports this view. Firstly, cars that run on fossil fuels cause air pollution and global warming. This is because these cars emit exhaust gases that come out of their exhaust pipes. Carbon dioxide is the main component of these gases which produces global warming. The oil and gas industries that are running primarily for the production of fossil fuels also contribute to air pollution indirectly. For example, according to a study conducted by Oxford University, 90% of air pollution is caused by fossil fuel cars. Secondly, as compared to the early days, the quantity of fossil fuels that is left is only a fraction. In the present day, there are millions of cars that run on fossil fuels in the world and all these vehicles are depleting the resources of fossil fuels. Also, different motorsport events that include a mammoth number of participants every year use a huge amount of gasoline which is a type of fossil fuel. For example, according to research conducted by the International petroleum organization, the world will be completely drained of fossil fuels by the year 2070. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the notion that fossil fuel powered cars should be banned and electric vehicles should replace them. Soon, all the vehicles on the road will be electric to ensure a healthy and pollution free environment.
In recent decades, there has been a major debate on whether gasoline powered
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vehicles
should
be banned
, and on whether
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electric
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vehicles
should replace them.
Personally
, I
strongly
advocate the ban on
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fossil
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fuel
powered
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cars
and
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electric
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cars
replacing them. This essay will discuss how
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air
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pollution
and the decreasing quantity of
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fossil
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fuels
supports this view.

Firstly
,
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cars
that run on
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fossil
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fuels
cause
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air
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pollution
and global warming. This is
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because
these
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cars
emit exhaust gases that
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come
out of their exhaust pipes. Carbon dioxide is the main component of these gases which produces global warming. The oil and gas industries that are running
primarily
for the production of
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fossil
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fuels
also
contribute to
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air
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pollution
indirectly
.
For example
, according to a study conducted by Oxford University, 90% of
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air
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pollution
is caused
by
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fossil
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fuel
cars.

Secondly
, as compared to the early days, the quantity of
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fossil
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fuels
that is
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left
is
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only
a fraction. In the present day, there are millions of
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cars
that run on
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fossil
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fuels
in the world and all these
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vehicles
are depleting the resources of
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fossil
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fuels
.
Also
,
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different
motorsport
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events
that include a mammoth number of participants every year
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use
a huge amount of gasoline which is a type of
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fossil
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fuel
.
For example
, according to research conducted by the International petroleum organization, the world will be completely drained of
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fossil
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fuels
by the year 2070.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
with the notion that
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fossil
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fuel
powered
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cars
should
be banned
and
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electric
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vehicles
should replace them.
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Soon
, all the
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vehicles
on the road will be
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electric
to ensure a healthy and
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pollution
free environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that family has the most powerful influence in a child's development. Other's say that other factors such as (television, friend, music etc. ) play a greater role today. Discuss + and -. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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