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Some people say that E- book and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that E- book and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 1
In recent years, the amount of waste produced by an ordinary family is progressively increasing. Some people are concerned about issues associated with the large volume of rubbish such as detrimental effects on the earth and wild animals. This essay will explore the problems around this topic and provide possible measurements that can be taken to solve this issue in both short and long term perspectives. Producing a large amount of waste negatively affects the environment, contributing to the global warming and various types of pollutions all around the world. This is partly due to the overuse of the plastic products, which are not eco-friendly. When the plastic items are burned or filled on the ground, they produce toxic chemicals, which contaminate the air, soils and oceans. Subsequently, it affects not only human health, but also wild animals. This is just one small example of the negative consequences that originates in overproduction of left materials. Some measurements should be taken, otherwise the situation will deteriorate. As for a short-term solution, the government can introduce a tax on household wastage. For example, people have to buy designated bags to throw away rubbish in my hometown, and the cost of bags is calculated in accordance with the size. In relation to the long-term objective, the government should organise awareness-raising campaigns through global conferences and educations in local communities for instance. People can be aware of this worsening situation and change their attitude towards the eco-friendly person, consequently minimising the amount of rubbish they produce. In conclusion, the waste minimisation is critical to save the environment and wild animals. Unless some actions are taken at higher level, the situation will only worsen, therefore, the government should implement regulations and awareness-raising campaigns to reduce the quantities of waste.
In recent years, the amount of
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waste
produced by an ordinary family is
progressively
increasing.
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Some
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people
are concerned
about issues associated with the large volume of rubbish such as detrimental effects on the earth and wild animals. This essay will explore the problems around this topic and provide possible measurements that can
be taken
to solve this issue in both short and long term perspectives.

Producing a large amount of
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waste
negatively
affects the environment, contributing to the global warming and various types of pollutions all around the world. This is partly due to the overuse of the plastic products, which are not eco-friendly. When the plastic items
are burned
or filled on the ground, they produce toxic chemicals, which contaminate the air, soils and oceans.
Subsequently
, it affects not
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only
human health,
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but
also
wild animals. This is
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just
one
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small
example of the
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negative
consequences that originates in overproduction of
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left
materials.

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Some
measurements should
be taken
,
otherwise
the situation will deteriorate. As for a short-term solution, the
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government
can introduce a tax on household wastage.
For example
,
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people
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have to
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buy
designated bags to throw away rubbish in my hometown, and the cost of bags
is calculated
in accordance with the size. In relation to the long-term objective, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
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organise
awareness-raising campaigns through global conferences and educations in local communities
for instance
.
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People
can be aware of this worsening situation and
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change
their attitude towards the eco-friendly person,
consequently
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minimising
the amount of rubbish they produce.

In conclusion
, the
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waste
Possible spelling mistake. 'minimisation' is British English.
minimisation
is critical to save the environment and wild animals. Unless
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some
actions
are taken
at higher level, the situation will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
worsen,
therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should implement regulations and awareness-raising campaigns to
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reduce
the quantities of
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waste
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that E- book and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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