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Some people say that criminals should be sent to prison. Others insist that they should do something else as a punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people say that criminals should be sent to prison. Others insist that they should do something else as a punishment. v. 2
Sending criminals in jail is the only effective way that is one of the most controversial issues that people like debating about. Because some people insist prison is only one way of rehabilitation solution to criminals and others say something else like imposing a fine or community service can be in place of that. In this essay, I will address my own opinion and analyze both views with supportive examples. Firstly, imprisonment could be the best way to decrease crime rates. For instance, basically, the purpose of jail terms is to make a criminal realize his/her mistakes and give them an opportunity to improve. However, some of petty criminals or habitual criminal such as pickpocketing are not intended of sever crime so that judges should be aware of a criminal' s past record to make right decision on trial. Sometimes, petty criminals can be convicted by wrong judgement or heavy sentences. It would not be the best resolution to discourage crimes. Secondly, there are plenty of method as a punishment without sending prison. For illustrates, according to one of the Singapore university research, they said imposing a fine on offenders was an effective way to make the public abide by the rules. Also, Singapore is one of the highest fine country among OECD countries. In my personal opinion, both tools are effective way of reducing crime rates and possibly people make not to violate the law but jail is outweighed by moral standard because vested interests can not be judged based on their property. In conclusion, I think that it is the best way that the government should focus on the prevention of crime rather than harsh prison sentences.
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and others
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own
opinion and analyze both views with supportive examples.

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crime
rates.
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, the purpose of jail terms is to
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make
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criminal
realize his/her mistakes and give them an opportunity to
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improve
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However
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some
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criminal
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pickpocketing
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crime
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judgement or heavy sentences. It would not be the best resolution to discourage
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of method as a punishment without sending prison. For illustrates, according to one of the Singapore university research, they said imposing a fine on offenders was an effective way to
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make
the public abide by the
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rules
.
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, Singapore is one of the highest fine country among OECD countries.

In my personal opinion, both tools are
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effective
way of reducing
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crime
rates and
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people
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make
not to violate the law
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by moral standard
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think
that it is the best way that the
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government
should focus on the prevention of
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crime
rather
than harsh prison sentences.
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IELTS essay Some people say that criminals should be sent to prison. Others insist that they should do something else as a punishment. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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