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Some people say that computers can translate languages, so children need not study foreign languages anymore. v.2

Some people say that computers can translate languages, so children need not study foreign languages anymore. v. 2
With the rapid development of computer science computers nowadays can translate to and from all major languages. Therefore, some people say that children do not need to study foreign languages anymore. From my point of view, I think computers will never take the place of human beings and without learning a language, people won't be able to take the benefit of computers translation related works. Firstly, language is closely related to a country's culture. Through language study, students can know the culture of a country. For example, if you study English, you can know a lot of things about English literature, English poetry, English festivals and English customs. I am English major. I like English romantic poems very much. The beautiful verses by Shelley, Burns and other famous English poets are still very popular in modern literature. We also enjoy some English festivals like Halloween, April Fools Day and Christmas, when people celebrate in night clubs and bars and have a lot of fun. Secondly, a computer is only a machine, whose programs are designed and written by human beings. Without an intimate knowledge of foreign languages and translation, we cannot write an efficient translation program for computers, which will be a cold machine and become useless. Thirdly, language study can cultivate a child's intelligence. Language is a unique ability of our human beings. Language study can improve children's audio ability. They can distinguish the subtle differences of pronunciation and rhythm. However, we ca not deny the advantages the computers have brought for us. We often need to read some foreign articles and materials in our study and work and some translation software can give us an immediate explanation of some difficult words, which saves us a lot of valuable time. To conclude, computers will never take the place of our human beings as a translator or an interpreter, because their ability is decided by human beings.
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people
won't be able to take the benefit of computers
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translation
related works.

Firstly
,
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language
is
closely
related to a country's culture. Through
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language
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study
, students can know the culture of a country.
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, if you
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English, you can know
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a lot of
things about English literature, English poetry, English festivals and English customs. I am English major. I like English romantic poems
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very
much. The
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beautiful
verses by Shelley, Burns and other
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famous
English poets are
still
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very
popular in modern literature. We
also
enjoy
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some
English festivals like Halloween,
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April Fools Day
and Christmas, when
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languages
and
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translation
, we cannot write an efficient
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translation
program for computers, which will be a
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cold
machine and become useless.

Thirdly
,
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language
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study
can cultivate a child's intelligence.
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Language
is a unique ability of our
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human
beings.
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study
can
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children's audio ability. They can distinguish the subtle differences of pronunciation and rhythm.

However
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not deny the advantages the computers have brought for us. We
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need to read
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some
foreign articles and materials in our
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study
and work and
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some
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translation
software can give us an immediate explanation of
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some
difficult words, which saves us
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valuable time.

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, computers will never take the place of our
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human
beings as a translator or an interpreter,
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because
their ability
is decided
by
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human
beings.
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IELTS essay Some people say that computers can translate languages, so children need not study foreign languages anymore. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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